I have held your hand when you were standing at the point
Of a moment when you did nothing but disappoint
But I can promise you here and I can promise you now
There is nothing so bad you could do that I will not allow
I don’t care if there are promised that you still owe
As long as I can cling to the memory of the man I did know
He is still here in my head controlling my heart
Not letting this new life that I crave for start
I can remember the day that I let him go
No matter how much I loved him he couldn’t know
That I didn’t have the strength to say
Without you my love I know my heart will decay
I was made in stone too proud to ever be pleading
So I endured my own sacrificial beating
The blades upon my skin cutting my flesh
Leaving me for dead slowing down my breath
What use is there anymore of words in blood
How are they possibly able to do any good
Now I only have them to recall who you are
And who it was that pushed me so far
I can remember the day that I let him go
No matter how much I loved him he couldn’t know
That I didn’t have the strength to say
Without you my love I know my heart will decay
Can you remember the day that I let you go
No matter how much I loved you, you couldn’t know
That I didn’t then have the strength to say
Without you my love I know my heart will decay
For without you my love
Without you my love
Without you my love
Without you my love my heart will decay
I can remember the day that I let him go
No matter how much I loved him he couldn’t know
That I didn’t have the strength to say
Without you my love I know my heart will decay
Author notes
option 4
A contest entry
- My Sixth Contest by in silver script.
320 points, ended June 24, 2007, 11 entries
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This is good... I lovehow somepeople guess stuff and are right! I broe up withhim... How did you know that... I don't remember saying it... Ok anyways thanks for the great write -
I can't believe i didn't comment this one. This was one of my favourites. I loved everything about it. I loved the title and also the way you have worded certain stanzas such as: I was made in stone too proud to ever be pleading So I endured my own sacrificial beating The blades upon my skin cutting my flesh Leaving me for dead slowing down my breath Even though the rhyming is off .. it works really well Thank you for entering :F
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beautiful poem, and a beautiful
song...could hear the richness of guitar and the beat
pulling us along. Really enjoyed this poem!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : ))
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the meter of the ABAB fashion was a bit off so it made this a very difficult read. though it was a bit cliché I think you brought the feeling of wanting into perspective well.
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Wow, I love this...it rhymed so well, and didn't sound forced, and I love the way it flowed, it just made me want to keep reading..
I hope everything's ok....Thanks for entering.
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