From inside it comes
A turn of power
A need for change
The sum of our strength
Is tallied every hour
The words of a few
Become a blood shower
Raise a glass to that
And drink the life we send
The way the sky is falling
We're well on our way
..To the end
What color is their skin?
- Punish them all, difference is a sin!
Was it us that gave them power?
- Never us, only them!
What do we do when we come to the end?
- Reload our guns and punish 'em again!
From inside it comes
A shift in power
A brutal aftermath
The taste of victory
Comes off as kind of sour
The freedom of the people
Makes one government cower
While another is formed among the free
And takes over within the hour.
Author notes
I wrote this while listening to HYPERPOWER! by Nine Inch Nails on repeat for 10 minutes lol.
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Great write, very strong and punchy, has a good flow to it without being rambly or losing its potency, straight to the point and original, nice, well done : )
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You had some good, non-cliche rhymes here, interesting that you chose the structure that you did...rhyming but not numbered lines. It was clear, got it's meaning across, and used language effectively. My critique is that the last line is kind of weak...I would probably replace it. Everything else is good!
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Well done
good writing and use of rhyme, it shows a point and it is shown well in this poem, keep up the good work -
Superb/Imaginative/Intriguing
Aye, very well written indeed. Excellant imagery. A very powerful piece. -
damn dude this one was awesome! I liked all of it. Your so talented with poetry. I hope to read more stuff like this
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