He sat silent on that bus,
Anticipating what the day would bring,
You see this child was not like us,
For he could not laugh or sing.
The blows fell like rain,
And he endured their taunts,
He fled from the terrible pain,
Lost deep in his mind's haunts.
Pity now this poor child,
For he had done no wrong,
The hatred of him mad and wild,
For him no laughter or sweet song.
His home offered no haven,
His father did not understand,
He was named scared and craven,
No kindness offered but a raised hand.
He retreated to his room,
And hid from his life,
He yearned for a tomb,
To hide from all this strife.
And thus he walked down the stairs,
In the darkness of the night,
To search for an end to his cares,
To blind his painful sight.
And so he took up that knife,
And took a steadying breath,
He finally ended his life,
And embraced the freedom of death.
He died a suicide.
Author notes
This is a dedication to everyone who has ever been bullied. Both to those who survived and for those who could take no more.
Written August 13th, 2003
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This poem was very very sad, yet so powerful. It had a great message about how being bullied is a terrible thing and can be very painful. Many many people can relate to this poem. Your dedication was also very nice. It went out to the heart of many people. Thank you for sharing this with me and entering it into my contest. Best of luck
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That's Sad,
Yet I know why it is the way it is.
Being bullied is such an awful thing, and also something I am able to relate to.
Plus, the rhyme scheme was very good in my eyes.
I enjoyed it a lot, even if it was so sad.
Someone had to write about it
Thanks so much for entering my contest!
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:Keara
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Good.
I think its pretty good. I like the way you worded things and the vocab you used, not just plain and simple, it makes it sound more ...magestic and like other worldly. lol. -
What a stunning write.
Its a beautiful.
Yet sad poem.
I really liked this.
Thanks for entering my contest.
Good luck.
♥ Christina -
Really well penned. Brought tears to my eyes. I love that you dedicated this to anyone who has ever been bullied. That just adds so much more to the poem. Thank you for entering my contest.
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hey this is nicely descriptive and a nice enjoyment to read. thank you for entering my contest and good luck. keep up the good work and i hope you write more poems like this one it is good. I think my favorite part was The blows fell like rain,
And he endured their taunts,
He fled from the terrible pain,
Lost deep in his mind's haunts.
that was descriptive...
MIchelle -
Very nicely done indeed. My question: Does anyone really survive after being bullied every day? I guess some are able to rise above it and I admire them for that, though the recluse that I have become now because of their words... well I wouldnt say it was surviving. I really like this one, its truly thought provoking and is an amazing write. Do excuse my rambles *rolls eyes* Thank you for sharing.
Take Care
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Excellent!
Excellent! I enjoyed this piece very much, I can completely relate.. simple.. I like it.. -
SHOULDBEREADATSCHOOL
WoW! What a powerful statement, most bullies dont have much of a brain to really appreciate the sadness they cause..Greatwrite -
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I really liked the structure used and the way you managed to pull the feeling out of a peice that was told from a 3rd person narrative. *big thumbs up* good luck hon -
really great
This is an amazing write, You have shown so clearly how people do nothing wrong but are bullied simply because someone feels like it, and at the end you deal fantastically with the way that increasing numbers of victims are dealing with their probalems, thank you for an enjoyable read.
Good luch in the contest
StephxX
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great poem well written and i know what this person went through as i survivde bullying myself.Great write an dgood luck in the contest
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Nice done
Dark, hard poem, full of sad feelings. It realy touched me. -
wow, this was a really powerful and well-written poem. I love it.
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TOO AMAZING
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wow..really powerful poem..definantly think you should win the contest
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So Brillenant
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wow wow wow this is so beyond sad i really loved this thx for entering
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i know you are probably thinking not another comment by some one else just babbaling about nothing but i will comment on it any was because i think that this poem is really sad but what is even worse is that this is reality for some people this is what they will do to end the shit that people do to them i think that you have expressed the way that a bullied child would feel i just love the way that you have writen this i know that i have said it before but i really strongly believe that you have just writen this so well the sadness in it has been expressed so amazingly well i think that this poem is just so sad but well i know i just repeating myself so i will leave it at this this was a great write and i really hoping to see more poems by you soon bye
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powerful expressions.
wow this is deep,there aren't very many words to describe this piece, i have never been bullied before so i don't know what it feels like, i have been the one defending the bullied sticking up for them so in a way it kinda hits home, this is very powerful and every bullie should read it and understand it. -
I can't believe I've not read this one before. Different from usual, but very touching. It brings back memories, but at least I am blessed now with a happiness which allows me to re-write aspects of the past I didn't like.
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DANG!!!!!!!! this really hit home for me!!!! this was soooo sadd!!!! it was really heart touching and i know where this is coming from. anyways, this was a great write. it was filled with emotions, experiences and it had a great flow. great write. keep up the amazing work!!! this will definately be added to my bookmarks....
~~crystalball
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Talk about hitting home really hard. For many things, my accent, clothes, kindness, weight, looks, music, and ect. I have been bullied, for really no reason, all because I am different. My family says if I were different didn't wear all the black and all I wouldn't be picked on. I really don't listen to them and they wonder why. Maybe its because they want me to change into something I'm not. Love the fact that your poem speaks to me so much.
~Anika, The Gothic Blood Rose
'I live to be who I am, why can't people just let me be who I am, instead of putting this gun in my hand.' -
another nice poem, slightly morbid for me, i hate suicide, but really, like everyone says, powerful. You had a strong feeling of sorrow for the child. well done.
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*omg this is the most powerful poem i have read since i've been on here....great job.....btw...thanx for ur comment on my poem,
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Wow, Very powerful peice, I was bullied and I guess this gets to me a bit. Well done, I absolutely love it. Great work.
-Carina-
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