hate resonates
distaste of disgust remains in the cotton mouth
finding only ways to make stone cry
but too much love, with too much resolve
all of the distaste has been tasted
and with a familiar blood
coming from a bitten tongue
no help is needed to point out the bright failures
but both sides continue
in vain attempts at love that pains
like a cat clawing to show it's affection
knowing the shadow of light behind the veil
but feeling it all none the less
how much longer can the avoided be so?
if only the dead understand all
does that make US so?
we just know too much of another
i feel that's what makes us suffer
so my love will resonate in the lack there of
goodbye ma cher
Author notes
erick: subliminalj whichever
A contest entry
- This is not Rejection: Walking Away from Love by darksideofme.
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Very good, I like how you worded it. It definately had me thinking. It made up for the fact that it's short. Very well done.
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you did not read! notes!
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i like this but i know this will be more powerful if 'articles' such as 'the' will be limited.
i like the opening lines but if you'll be removing 'the' it'll be more poetic. just my thoughts and suggestions
thanks for sharing and keep writing.
HENSLEY
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it's damn hard to say goodbye, but it feels so good after it's done... especially when it's the right thing to do...
what a powerful piece... well done!
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Wow
This resonates what I've been trying to leave behind... I loved to read this poem... every word put together in perfect harmony that flows like a gentle breeze of fresh air... though cold numbing strikes to walk away from the relationship but like you said it so very well, how much can be avoided and for how long... walking away might not be what we want but just be best for both of us in a realtionship... boy it's hard to walk away, but got to do what needs to be done... good luck in the contest... take care Minoo
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