There once was a girl from New Orleans
Who like to eat buckets full of beans
She always ate too much
In turn it made her lush
But the sounds she makes are very mean
Author notes
This is the third form I've ever tried. Hope it works and hope you like it!
A contest entry
- Form Poetry -- Round Two. Invite Only. by Porcelain Princess.
300 points, ended July 1, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I have to tell you, I'm very undecided about this poem. Here's why.
Okay, bad stuff first. Limericks really should have a distinct flow to them, and when I read yours it seemed awkward and choppy. Also, the fourth line seemed very out of place. Another thing I don't like (and this is purely personal and I will not judge your poem for the contest based on this, honest) is that you rhymed 'beans' and 'mean' with 'New Orleans'. I have a lot of family from Louisiana, and 'Orleans' is pronounced ore-lans.
Okay. Now good stuff. Your poem was funny and definitely made me laugh, which is very good for a limerick. I like most of your word choices and you've made a nice little story here.
Thanks for entering! -
LMAO This is too funny~ but then I'm one of those people who always find humor in farts.... good luck in the contest! this was great!
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Your Form - Limerick
Good luck!
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