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seasonal transition

clouds melt;

delirium dances
down to earth

like autumn
leaves.

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10 words in 10 minutes with the prompt 'liquid'

In a list

A contest entry

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  • forwardfalling
    June 22, 2007
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    Excellent. Nicely done.


  • Naridill
    June 22, 2007
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    Brand spanking tastic!!!
    Loved it!


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    June 22, 2007
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    Brilliant. Love the alliteration.


  • between slices
    June 22, 2007

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    oooh... nice images you invoke. it's like i can see the transformation of clouds to rain to leaves. i like how you've arranged this in stages, and the fall of words.
    wonderfully penned!

    thanks for entering!! good luck!

  • between slices
    June 22, 2007
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    Prompt: Liquid!!
    HURRY!!

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