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Teddibly Abnormal
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satin petals droop
engaging to touch to earth
-has it all but died
fetch it from it's dying state
regress hope in life to me
flower petals stir
dangling but with a hue
-nature turns around
colour strains right through my heart
to soften the willing scope
~*~
Author notes
Poetry Form: Tanka.
Information taken from Baymoon.com
http://www.baymoon.com/~ariadne/form/tanka.htm
YOUR COMPOSITION.
In English, the Tanka is usually written as five short lines.
* Traditionally in Japanese, the tanka is five groups of sounds, each of 5 or 7 sound units. The first and third units have 5 sound units (as in a haiku), while the other units have 7 sound units
* Many writers in English use fewer syllables in a tanka, in recognition that English syllable are longer than Japanese sound units. As a result, a tanka could use fewer syllables.
Of course, there is much more to the Tanka than the number and length of its lines. To a first approximation:
1. Begin with a haiku and the haiku sensibility. Most commonly, this means that the poet writes something brief (such as three lines much like a haiku) depicting nature.
2. Then add the rest (usually two lines) to create a new relationship, perhaps adding information about the internal, emotional state of the poet, to show what the opening lines signify to her. This lets the poet link nature and a feeling or emotion.
A contest entry
- Form Poetry -- Round Two. Invite Only. by Porcelain Princess.
300 points, ended July 1, 2007, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Does Tanka read with Punctuation?
Comments
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Your syllable counts are simply flawless, and your imagery is vivid and breathtaking. Great work.
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Your Form - Tanka
Good luck!
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