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Through Raven Eyes

Moonlight filters through the clouds
As acid rain falls down.
He holds a blade near her neck
And rests his hand on her waist.
Her arms are bound, mouth taped.
Her heart races fast when
His warm breath hits her neck.
She's frightened and in love.

He tightens his weaponless grip
And whispers "I love you,".
As the thunder rolls
And the lightening flashes,
A raven cries.
He slides to the right.
With him he forces her to flow.
Then spins her round a time or two,
Dips her low in his one arm,
And kisses her pale brow.

She flinches as the blade comes near
Grazing her dangerously again.
She's lived with him so long
A captive in his home.
Though tortured many a time,
This seems more real than before.

He drops her with a spin
So she lands face down in mud.
She struggles to her knees
Slipping in the sludge.
Then he grabs her stringy hair
And kneels there behind her.
Massaging her tender scalp-
One last sick affection shown.
He tightens his grip
And then readies the knife.
In one swift movement
He shows her soul night.

Her body leans back on him,
Her blood merges with the rain
That runs down over his fingers.
His knife is thrust into the ground,
And body dragged into a shed.

The Raven standing near,
Perched in a dying tree,
Cackles madly into the night.
He watches the steady man
Walking from the shed,
Who stops in the rain
Bringing his fingers to his mouth
To taste the sweat, blood, and tears
On his killing hands.




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  • unraveled
    July 16, 2007
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    wow. i usually don't read this kind of poem but i must say this was a great story. my favorite line is "Massaging her tender scalp- One last sick affection shown." you did a great job and i don't have any suggestions for improvement. thanks for entering,
    <3cassidy


  • reckless abandon
    July 14, 2007

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    Wow, that was intense in a way. It was interesting to read, I like it. Thanks for entering the contest!

    -KP]