Distant cries
of empty hearts
beating as one
fingers reach
a touchless soul
with silence
upon my lips
frozen tears
shatter upon
my face
as my arms
catch the piece
of crystalized tears
a vision appears
of your face
remembering
your good byes
Please tell me what you think
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Wow...
ok, I'm trying to find words worthy of describing this piece of poetry. Well, first of all, the title is very catching, and the way your described that special feeling left a tear on my cheek. Beautiful words, very different from other heartbreak poems.
"frozen tears
shatter upon
my face
as my arms
catch the piece
of crystalized tears"
You are amazing. Really. I mean it
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wow, :'( reminds me of a friend i lost..
excelent
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Very interesting write ... you make it accessible with your words ... taking us there ... it's very poignant. Anyone in particular or was it just pic inspired??
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This is a heartbreaking write of loss and suffering. I like the phrase "frozen tears shatter upon my face". The line stuck out for me. -
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Thank you for the grand review
LISA
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This is an amazing write full of emotions and written well thank you for sharing Good Job -
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Thank you for your review and beautiful comments LISA
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Bandit's Auction #3
Filled with emotions and beautifully penned down.
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Thank you for your review LISA
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beautiful poem..So detailed describing the feeling of someone after loosing someone they loved..Great job -
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Yes I always seem to write about sad thing and death, but am trying to venture out to humor writes. Thank you for your read, LISA
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Bandits Auction #3
Wow what wonderful and amazing imagery. Such emotion and depth. I so enjoyed reading Keep up the brilliant writing.
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Thank you dear for your great review, when I saw this pic I knew it was talking to me. That it had something sad to say. And this is what its telling me. LISA
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wow this is peircing sis very very poetic with your twist of style as always you know what i mean i really enjoyed this here read sis
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What can I say sis need to be different some time Thank you for your comments and support love you (LISA)
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yeah, touchless is one word, but no problem, this is a poety contest, not a spelling bee. Never-the-less, great poem, and good luck in the contest.
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Thank you for your support well appreciated (LISA)
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Wow, this really paints a great picture and captures a moment. Each word describes the feelings of a break-up. This is a really great poem. Thanks for sharing
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Thank you when I saw this pic I knew it was talking to me. That it had something sad to say. And this is what its telling me. Thank you for your beautiful review my friend. (LISA)
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Liked the brevity of the lines and the flow of this poem - vivid visual images shared through the words you used in these lines.
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Extremely powerful in such short lines...well done. Best of luck and TY for entering....
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Thank you dear for running a great contest. I really enjoyed writing this piece. Thank you for you comments (LISA)
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yes indeed distant tears of lonelinesss touchy,sad,great write,heart breaking one
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Thank you sweet rose. Sadness is hard to forget some times (LISA)
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I really like this
The imagry is wonderful and I really like the structure=) the picture goes with it perfectly=)
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Thank you my friend for you beautiful words and great review. glad you liked it. (LISA)
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Nice job Lisa,
but you like for me to visit you and warm you up with some hot tears, and a hot body? Please say yes....I know that we can feel coldly about things in the past, and the ice hurts, but it can be melted by a return to the present, and the warm glow of a new love. What's done is done, and what hasn't come, is still yet to come. Think forwards, not backwards, my love.
Love you,
Brazos
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I you don't mine I have cold feet. Ok They need some loving too. Sweety I always thing ahead, one step ahead of you. But never behind. Love your comments so much you always make my day. Love (LISA)
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bravo
this is one powerful write,
touched my heart.
loved the imagery.
alot of sadness.
very well written.
thanks.Cricket.
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Yes memories are sad and so is when one loves some one that leaves you. thank you for you comments (LISA)
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