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Love's Paradox

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You are a phenomenon to me
I am consumed by you
My being becoming fragile
with the torment I endure

You say you abhor my feelings for you,
seeing them as an abnormality in me
Knowing my love for you is consecrated,
you choose to treat it sacrilegiously
making an infinitesimal attempt
to love me

When I feel worthless,
wanting to normalize my life,
and leave this dreadful situation behind me
You grab me with all you have
I am left gasping for breath
My neck left with magenta bruises
refusing to let me go, then
professing an undying love for me
Such a paradox of disinformation

It is then that I abhor you

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

For intergroup contest word bank....

abnormality
infinitesimal
abhor
consecrate
phenomenon
paradox
worthless
sacrilegious
magenta
torment
gasping
consumed
fragile
normalize
disinformation
dreadful

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  • coffeeangel316
    July 10, 2007

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    this is such a good write and I think it was great you could use those words from the word bank. great job with a great flow


  • CherylAnn
    June 28, 2007

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    WOW Beautiful

    amazing use of the word bank...This is just amazingly beautiful...
    Blessings
    ~Cheryl~

  • Hekate gold member
    June 28, 2007
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    I loved the imagery in this one!

  • Griswold silver member
    June 26, 2007

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    Very nicely done with a tough set of words to work with, I know I had a hard time of it, best of luck in the contest...Scott


  • Naridill
    June 26, 2007

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    Much enjoyed, you penned such brillance, nicely done!!!


  • countrybabe gold member
    June 24, 2007

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    Excellent Piece

    This is an excellent piece of writing right here. Well done on this piece and good luck in the intergroup contest.

    Keep writing

    Countrybabe


  • Laura
    June 24, 2007
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    ohhhhh bloody hell this is amazing i totally love it, you go girl!! xxx


  • Whoochi gold member
    June 23, 2007
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    WOWZA.....Yo BB...this is one gripping piece and have we not lived this in some way, form or fashion, with some hint of resemblance...oh am loving that word.."abhor" Exceelent use of the word bank and you have created mystery and suspense with such a raw piece...You are on fire.......GO....


  • Griswold silver member
    June 22, 2007
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    Beautifully written, good luck in the contest...Scott

  • soulfultia gold member
    June 22, 2007

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    I started the read and thought, Whew...this was deep and gripping as I was reading, I think I was relieved to see it was a word bank! ha! Great job, you had me convinced!! Great work, good luck in the contest ~Tia


  • markgrif gold member
    June 21, 2007
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    YAY Great job!. I love how you used magenta.
    Fantastic.

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