its the battle of love
the war against guys
the fight on heartbreaks and cries
the rebels against staying up late
remembering the sweet first date
the haters of the fake romance
facaded to get inside your pants
and every whispered i love you in your ear
to make you let go of the hidden fear
of giving it up letting it go
to someone you only think you know
the aftermath is nothing but pain and shame
with noone but yourself to blame
you end up his whore
getting shoved out the door
when hes done with you
you wish youd die
but you want to love him
and imagine he loves you
no matter the things he makes you do
but let him go, respect your heart
you were in love but its time to part
hes not the one you want, you need
you messed up but you can still succeed
just turn it around start over again
itll be bad at first but then, youll find someone new
and he'll love you too
one day it will all be okay
so why not fix everything today
cause its just the battle of love
the war on hearts
that are filled with misery off the charts
A contest entry
- Him that I love, I wish to be Free- Even from me... by Jasmine Rayne.
700 points, ended January 23, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - just about anything :) by nobodys-girl.
300 points, ended April 10, 2008, 56 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i am one of those people who fear love for basically the reasons in this poem. its stupid and very jaded. i love the flow of this, the rhyme, and the entire thing. thankyou so much for entering my contest and good luck!
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I really enjoyed this. Guys are so..... ridiculous. If this has happened to you, I'm so sorry. It must've been tough. I loved your poem, though. Thank you for entering and good luck. ^_^
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Awesome thought provoking lines here, thinking maybe some fine detail with spit & polish and this will be a masterpiece...read it again, work on it...I know alot of this speaks to many people...have been in this battle too many dam times...you start with the attraction and drew me in and then the parting, i loved the overall theme of this and the structure, beginning, middle, ending with hope and inspiration....well done Jen!
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This has a very strong message and I like it. It shows your hurt but also your strength to move on and do well. Very well done. Good job
Soulful Woman -
I like this a lot Jenn. Its a beautiful poem, and I can sense your heartache. Never forget I love you, with all y heart and all my soul
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