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What you did

You never loved me
and that broke my heart
You never cared
And that broke my spirit
You never helped guide me
And I lost my sense of direction
You never did anything for me
And I couldn't help myself
You put me out on the streets
And I was left to fend for myself
You hurt me deeply
And I died


Author notes

option 4


I wasn't sure how to end it so if you have any suggestions please let me know. I started it like the character fell in love with a guy who didn't love her back but then i got stuck and made it like she had parents who didn't love her and didn't care for her and put her out on the streets when she turned 16 with no money or anything. And basically that killed her. She had nothing left. So she died.

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  • Naridill
    January 28, 2008

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    You died and still write poetry
    ohh. .. its a metaphor
    Beautifully penned, your emotions are stark and intense.

    Thanks for entering,