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Battle and Reprieve

Strange footprints found on unknown shores, after so many long-waged wars;
The war was for gain of will; fought not with hate, but love instilled;
The Victor began His gallant fight before Time came into sight;
The object of love: a certain soul, living on this unknown shoal;
This shore, his home, was strange to him, enraged by his state of sin;
Restless, he was, wrapped in fear, not knowing he was held so dear,
By the One he feared and kept at bay, yet for him, was his Way;

Still, the One, held His ground, by a passion divinely wound;
He came with sword of grace and truth, and His heart, with which to prove;
When threat perceived, the soul resisted the One, (who patiently insisted);
A strange thing happened on that shore: the One held out His glorious sword;
Seeing the hilt offered to him, he took the sword, in his sin;
The rage fueled his heart with dread, thus smote the One, and struck Him dead;

Then the soul began to grieve, seeing what his hand achieved;
The beauty of the One diminished; the Crime, it seemed, had been finished;
He felt inside himself a cry, yet knew not what, or what else why;
For three days hence, his heart confounded; with his fear, a grief compounded;
Three days gave way to glorious light, for the One arose with righteous might;
He came to the soul, to grant reprieve, whose rage left when he believed;

These footprints belong to the Lord, no longer an enemy, but now Adored,
He came in love to never part the shores of which are my heart;
To gain my soul, He won by losing, and let my sin be His bruising;
I meant for evil, while He for good, so took me in, as He only could;

In time these footprints, no longer strange, for this new state was pre-arranged;
These footprints of the One now near, the Great High Priest is now dear.


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Triggered by the following quote:

“We have found a strange footprint on the shores of the unknown.”--Arthur Eddington

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  • Pianokidd
    July 6, 2007

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    Man, that was absolutely breathtaking...beautifully done.


    I meant for evil, while He for good, so took me in, as He only could;

    In time these footprints, no longer strange, for this new state was pre-arranged;
    These footprints of the One now near, the Great High Priest is now dear.


  • breakingXwithXwords
    June 25, 2007

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    great piece. excellent lyrical storytelling. the action and images pulled you along very well.

    i especially liked:
    "Then the soul began to grieve, seeing what his hand achieved;"

    great line. thank you for sharing this with us and keep up the great work.

    - andre


  • FAH faithandhope
    June 25, 2007

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    Wonderful!

    This is an honest, heartfelt, well written poem. You are very talented and with much wisdom. I enjoyed this and could relate very well. Thank-you very much for sharing this inspirational piece. Many Blessings, FAH


  • ProudMomma
    June 25, 2007

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    i love this poem it reminds me of a poem i once read called footprints but this one is better because its a little more detailed and makes you imagine more great write,
    Never stop writing!
    ~NiCoLe~


  • Papyrus
    June 25, 2007
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    --the best poem describing Jesus's accomplishment that I have read yet. You must have spent a lot of time and thought writing this. I also like how you tie your own experience into it.

    --my brother plays the drums too, and I wish he could say the same!

    thanx for the most excellent write.
    -Pap.


  • ventus11
    June 25, 2007
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    it is way deferent from anything i've ever read, it almost sounds perfesional.


  • Lady Altheia gold member
    June 25, 2007

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    This is a great epic piece and I love the flow and rhyme. I very much enjoyed reading this piece. I am remided of the verse of the footprints in the bible where an okld man was walking with Jesus and going through moments in his life. At the most down and depressing times of the old man's life, only one set of footprints were seen instead of two. The old man said, Lord why have you forsaken me?" In which the Lord replied, "I have not forsaken you but carried you through your troubled times." Anyways that is just a paraphrase.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    June 25, 2007

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    Wow,

    You sure have taken this piece of inspiration here to a new level..as I can see in your author's comments what started the spark that created the flame. Well done, very detailed, and I appreciate you sharing your talents here. Peace, Timothy, aka poeticweaver~


  • debilynn gold member
    June 23, 2007

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    what a great tale you have penned from this quote. you are a very talented artist. thank you for sharing this. keep writing! God bless you always


  • Griswold silver member
    June 21, 2007

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    Beautifully, and I mean beautifully written. A great qote you got and made of it a wonderful story, full of love and forgiveness...Bravo!!!...Scott

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