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prosperity

wondering at what burns inside my mind.
the world's gone mad.
women just make investments, never fall in love,
and those few who do are cast away for younger models
in more prosperous
times.

i see her in my mind's eye.
or at least i try.
she smiles, understands,
and pain goes away
in more prosperous
times.

but will she be there
in those better days?
or will I, the man,
be cast aside for a younger model
in more prosperous
times?

is that all we are?
users, simply using,
never learning,
always moving forward,
knowing with our "wisdom"
that there will always be something
MORE
in more "prosperous"

times?

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  • Ellis gold member
    December 5, 2007
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    Excellent

    So well said, as always.
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  • Endeavor gold member
    July 11, 2007

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    Very Good


    Interesting thoughts

    I think the chalanges you note move both ways with ease

    This may be learned or inate, or just a growing trend

    Well said in words

    Rick


  • Mark Rickerby gold member
    July 1, 2007

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    So true, buddy. We're never happy where we are. We're always dreaming about some fantasy "there" and when we get there, another "there" takes its place. We fantasize about being with someone else because they're a mystery and the one we're with isn't. The mystery is perfect, with no human flaws. As someone said, "Familiarity breeds contempt." And the happiest, most attractive people we know are the people we don't know very well.

    Very thought provoking write, my friend. Hope all is well with you. Thanks for the comment on my latest poem.

    Mark

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    June 21, 2007

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    Akin to a hook line within a song the writer compounds the piece with the repetition of "prosperous times" and explores the perspicacity of prosperity.That the writer is male is felt by the phraseology that women do not fall in love but make investments and the reader,as a woman,felt sideswipped both for the self and for all sisters who not only love but pay the price for love which is not of equal level commitment/chemistry/companionship and spend much of their lives recovering from such love,or as I say trying to deal whilst trying to heal.
    The writer then explores the possibility that he too may reject and replace as well as be rejected and replaced and perhaps the overall question as to whether we are all users is not possible to answer but a high percentage of men are unfaithful and or abusive,one in three men in the states and one in four in the uk,am unsure what or why the reasons are but the underlying current of philophobia is felt alongside the duality of the base and basic need to feel loved and the reader confesses 'tis her one phobia,love and the name philophobia belittles the fear of being wounded to the very soul by what another considers love,for just as with religion,tis not love itself but what an individual does to use it as an excuse,if within a sentence using the word love there appears the word "but" then love is lost,true love,love that prospers and brings prosperity has no if's,but's,why's or maybe's,love either exists or it doesn't.
    As you offered to return read please would you comment on "Held behind breast plate" which is under the section of poems marked "focused on" on my author page please?It is lengthy and wordy - only fair to forewarn you