Heartbroken angel, she silently flies
Sorry and solemn with tears in her eyes
Once with a beaming, bright face full of love
She sadly returns to her home high above.
Her dull and limp wings hanging off to her side
Her feelings and reality now collide
She knows that she never should've loved the young man
But something inside her, it thinks that she can.
His muddled brown hair made her weak at the knees
And so did his eyes that were blue like the seas.
His good tempered ways, his humor and wit
Made her feel like this love would always fit.
They say she’s an angel, and he is from earth,
That sweet, dashing boy full of laughter and mirth.
Because of her grief, she’ll never be the same
And heartbroken angel wishes she just knew his name.
Heartbroken angel, she silently flies
Sorry and solemn with tears in her eyes
Once with a beaming, bright face full of love
She sadly returns to her home high above.
Author notes
THIS IS PICTURE NUMBER 1!!! woot
i love anime. i just do. when i saw this contest and this picture, i thought, 'well, look! this contest was made for me!' i had to enter. the picture barely shows any emotion, so i thought her grief would be 'beyond measure'. this is usually the case with fantasy/anime love, and no emotion usually means they're sad. i mean, when you're incredibly indescribably unbelievably happy, you don't expressionlessly sit there! ok i'm done ranting.
A contest entry
- Ages 13 and Under ONLY ~ Pick an Image and write what comes to mind by Amunet Wolfbane.
300 points, ended June 26, 2007, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
comment purleease!
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Wow. This is beautifully crafted, and sadly intense...I really loved it. May I add you to my favorites?
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gaaah sasha I still can't get over how gorgeous this poem is. no wonder you won gold.
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I usually don't like rhymes but this one me likey! lol It has natural flow which a lot of rhyme does not have. An excellent story about an angel torn from the far yet near barriers of heaven and earth. Great job lil' sis!
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You did a wonderful job on your rhymes in this piece, it flows very well and is beautifully crafted. I like how this captivates the reader, takes them into the piece. Very excellent work :D
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AMAZING!!!
Wow Sasha! :0
That was unbelievable! I don't know what to say! It was so good! You're a GREAT writer and poet! Loved it!
~ Krissy(nickname) (from Kiwi)
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I also really like your page! Mine is so dull! Yours is filled with life!
I pretty much just started this poetry website thing and I'm still fixing everything up which is boring!!! Can't wait to see all your other poems! 
Well it's getting late and I really have to go! Again, (like I said just about a zillion times!! lol ) that was a terrific poem!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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One more thing, I think that you could take out the his before wit in line 11.
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thank you! I needed that.
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You have a very consistant rhythm here and I like that - especially when used with rhyme-schemes well done!
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and I think you will so wint the contest!
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This is a very beautifull poem! GREAT job...and yet it also sad
but still beutifull and the flow is very ni keep up the great work!
Bami
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I think you have a good chance in this contest... snicker snicker fabulous
LiSe
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The rhyme and storyline in this are very good indeed, you've penned some amazing imagery with your words. I especially like the repetition of the 1st stanza at the end of the piece, it gives it an extra strength. Well done with this and thank you for sharing. La x
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Best Yet
OH MY GOD!! Sasha, this is your best yet. I love it. The whole thing flows wonderfully and the rhyming is perfect for the idea. I don't usually post "WONDERFUL" comments, but this poem is worth it! It also reminds me of well, me, two weeks ago, so there's a personal connection. Sweetly sad. Good luck in the contest! (I'm going to enter too)
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ooh! cool.
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