Her voice of calm speaks upon the field of sunrays,
As her spirit sways with soft beautiful love and grace.
Her humbleness still nurtures the fields of her heart,
Though she knows the love of her life is absent.
Balletting below the sunrise of her love's memories,
So my love, I dance under your once sweet happiness.
Yet I don’t want to be forever the willow wind,
Trying to keep my heart tuned in merry melodies,
With a voice so light that the flowers stay loved.
Lovely memories of you sometimes holds my heart,
As I watch her tears cascade during her sleeps alone,
Her love that left to rest upon another women's feild.
Forever I wait though you may never come to me.
You may find another women and take her to your heart.
Giving her my love I added to your wondrous love.
So beautiful, she may want to stay in your heart,
And leave me to be forever the willow wind...
In a list
A contest entry
- The Majestic Willow Tree. by Poetryintheblood.
375 points, ended October 15, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sweet Kisses at Dusk by DevinCora.
1050 points, ended January 23, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - [x] Lots of options [x] Something for everyone! Read! by Jade-.
450 points, ended January 28, 2008, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - the wind cries mary by unraveled.
1100 points, ended February 26, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is pretty good... but it's really bright... for a contest that is about like nightmares and rape and stuff... too bright for this contest. Maybe the next one. Good luck in the open contests. Keep up your good work. I'm sorry but I have to DQ this.
Crimson -
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"Her love that left to rest upon another women's feild."
Don't you mean "field" instead of "feild" ??
This piece is very well written, and I really love how this is like watching someone else's memories. Good job! -
Thank you for your beautiful entry, Josephine
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oh no... but yeah i understand... it's in our nature to make sacrifices for the ones we love isn't it? A very nice comparison left me feeling soft, sweet but slightly lonely~ sigh~
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I like it, this is a good write. It's not quite what I am looking for, but as it is the best (and likely only) poem that isn't dark or DP, you may have a chance. Just for all to know, I am looking for unconditional love. Fairy tale love. I want something that will make me smile, this has a "love lost" feel to it.
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Forever the willow wind .....sigh. So very descriptive and bursting with imagery. Judging this contest is going to be so hard with beautiful entries like this one. The flow is perfect and the whole write left me to ponder over its beautiful lines. Thank you so much for entering my contest and good luck.
Shaz xx
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really nice i loved it. nice job on it thanks for entering.
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Very beautiful and genuine, I truly enjoyed it. Thanks so much for sharing.
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wow! so good! I loved the line "Giving her my love I added to your wondrous love" beautifully written! Thank you so much for entering! Excellent work and the best of luck in my contest!!!
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This is lovely. You have quite a way with words because you chose descriptive, lovely words without searching through a thesaurus (sp?). I liked this a lot. The write had a wonderful flow. Thank you for entering my contest.
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well this is a good poem, i enjoyed reading it, and i can see the message behind it, but if you used a picture from the contest, cause it is what it sounds like you need to put the link in the box. good job though and good luck in the contes
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Well Done
This is a truly sad yet wonderfull poem, you have weaved a tale that touches the heart of all who read it, I really enjoyed this poem, blessings John
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so beautifully sad. you use your words so creatively so differently. like i sad i love your poetry.
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this is so heart wrenching! I can feel the pain as I read.
A beautiful write.
Peace and Love
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This piece certainly speaks volume to me. Oh my God, this is really heartfelt. With true spirit and love, your place is safe for it is sacred. There is a throne that only two people may share, it is the throne of the King and the Queen. You are of the Royalty, you're place is well preserved.
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Beautiful
and very tenderly written. Softly heart-and-soul-felt; an impressive piece worthy of the gold. Write on, shine on, Poetess!!!
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A BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN PIECE
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sleeps alone...
Sad haunting work poet! Some very effective imagery evoked in this work!
Good luck in the contest!
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A beautiful, yet sorrowful poem filled with the lingering of memories of the one whom left your heart to be with another. Memories with time cling to our heart, yet they sometimes are so painful that we can not see past the heartache and try to move forward to open ourselves to another journey!
A most beautiful presentation of emotions.
Thank you for this lovely entry to my contest!
Des
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I like that one, I didn't read the last one cause it was too long. I'll get to it though. But i liked this one. and there's no guarantee and that he'll come to you. all you can do is hope and pray.
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a great poem
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