The treadmill is so great
It helps me lose all kinds of weight
There is 3500 calories in a pound
one of these days i might fall to the ground
I wanna lose a pound a day
than and only then can i go outside and play
is this dangerous ?
you figure it out for your-self
because while your pondering that question
I'll be on my way to perfection
Author notes
I wrote this today (june 21st,2007) after using the tread-mill for awhile. hmmm. since i got up at 10, i've had a bowl of cereal and a tuna burger to eat. And i've lost 475 calories on the treadmill. but i need to lose 3500 before i go to bed. and do it again tomorrow and the next day. But dont worry u guys, i'm not anorexic. i still eat, just more healthy, and i exercise more. =) don't worry bout me melissa (lady gaia) i love u girl <3 xoxoxoxox
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As a former dancer (and a former anorexic), I understand that nothing tastes as good as thin feels. However, you need to be careful, since you are exhibiting many of the same symptoms I did when I developed anorexia; don't get carried away. Just make sure to eat healthily and exercise, but don't go over the top.
Please, take care.
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I like this poem a lot. It's really funny. You only have one mistake. In the third stanza, 2nd line, you have than when it should be then. Great write. Alyssa
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WOW i took a long time to reply to your post, lmao. I'm sorry. I'm glad you liked my poem
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Wow nice write Well it is nov how did it work were you able to stay healthy to? how much did you loose?
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i lost like 7 pounds, i was doing good. but than i came back to my good ole friend, junkfood. lol
but i'm okay i guess.
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Good poem.. I guess there is nothing wrong in wanting t be healthy.. AS long as the limits are known...
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good poem.
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Sheesh, too many calculations with numbers, and I'm an azn guy, I'm "supposed to love it", but whatever, I'm going against the whole profiling thing. Anyways, to talk about perfection, I hate perfectionist. But your poem was great anyways, keep writing!
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Honey, you are gorgeous just the way you are. Don't work out so hard, your body has come with everything it needs to function. Baby, the body is an incredible thing, and I agree with nymphetamine girl, take it easy okay, i really care about you and don't want to see you overwork yourself or get hurt. I love you and take care of yourself, please babe. I'm always here if you need it.=]
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Boys who only like skinny girls are not very good boys. trust me a good boy would like you for who you ar enot what you look like.. But if yah wanna lose weight you don't wanna loose it to fast either.
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Also...I just read your comment below, replying to someone else...But If you are trying to lose weight because boys will then like you...Dont....If you want to lose weight, do it because YOU want to, not because you want a guy to like you. Trust me, I dont have the best body and i know that, there are things about me that i would love to change and ive had many people throughout my life constantly tell me im fat and ugly etc...and the worst part..."No guy is going to like you because youre fat" but the thing is...That is everyone elses opinion and im not going to change myself because some guy doesnt want to date a "fat" chick...if he doesnt like my body than my body wasnt made for him...Now, after being myself and not listening to what others have to say...I found a guy who absolutely loves me AND my body...The body that others told me wasnt good enough for any guy...All i have to say is dont change just to make someone like you...If they dont like your body the way it is...then its like is said, you're body wasnt made for that person.
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Thanks for your comment
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Well after reading this poem, and readin your author notes...im finding it harder to believe that your.."ok"..Yes it is perfectly fine to want to be healthy and in shape, but you dont need to lose a pound a day i can tell you that right now. If that is your goal than that is dangerous because some people get so worked up into it that they actually become addicted to exercising and it becomes just as dangerous as anorexia and bulimia...and just as hard to stop...Just be careful ok? if u need anything at all...sometimes its easier to talk to someone you dont know and with that said...you can talk to me anytime, on here or you can email me.. SSE1920@aol.com
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i like this poem, but you dont need to practically starve yourself, and over work yourself to reach something that no one can get to=perfection.. thats not even a word to me, but please, just realize what you are doing to yourself before you go off and over work yourself
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i'm not starving myself. trust me. But i want to get skinney.
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Lmao it's good..But I dont quite agree with it. Just because you get thin, it doesnt mean you're perfect. As a matter of fact, I think that's far from it. There's no such thing as perfect. I know that sounds cliche, but its true. Just like theres no such thing as normal, or different. Because who are we to judge people and how they look, dress, feel, or think? I think that's totally pathetic and diplomatic. I think that's what society is trying to do to us. Make us judge people, and turn our backs on what's right.
And only when we all finally realize these stupid mistakes that the generations before us have made, can everyone truely be happy and live in harmony.
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yea. i agree with you. but this all goes back to my self confidence issue's, and boys, lol boys only seem to like skinney girls who look perfect, but really aren't. I hate it how shallow people can be, makes me so mad.
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