You stormed into my life
with no particular warning
you lit up my world when
I met you each morning.
We’d go on adventures just you and me
With every knew place
who knows what we would see
you, so pleasant, so charming
so true ,I’d stare with longing
but knew I couldn’t have you
these feeling grew stronger
as your hand touched my face
everything was perfect
except the time and the place
I knew this was forbidden
From thousands of miles away
But I couldn’t help it
I wanted you more each day
My phone rang
and I explained where I was
but didn’t tell the truth
about the kisses and hugs
oh how I hate to do this
I don’t want it to end
But I know he wouldn’t like it
With you holding my hand
Though with love for you
my heart is aching
but my sweet boy
I'm already taken!!
A contest entry
- Another Anything Contest by DeadlyTurnip.
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Aww
Yes I relate so very much in the present time... Its a pain becuz you never no wot could have been- great write hun x
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hi sweety ,thanks for reading..and commenting....
but fortunately for me ,in this instance,i found out what could have been.....We GOT MARRIED!!
turned out ok ...i left my bf for him......good move !!
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That was smooth as silk and directly from the heart.
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I enjoyed this. Forbidden love is so...angsty and sweet. I believe you may have a typo in line 3... did you mean "my world" or "the world" instead of simply "world?" Also, line 8... did you mean "you're" ? It would make grammatical sense, but I realize that sometimes a poet chooses to forego grammar.
All-in-all a good job though.
Write on, poet.
Blessings,
Myth -
Lol. This is really good. The rhyming is kinda on and off and there are some spelling errors. Good job though.
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Oh, but for temptation so pure and sweet, just when you have that one chance meeting. This is a great take on forbidden love.
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This is a great poem. Is it about being in a relationship, but your falling in love with another guy to ? cuz that's what I think it's about, but i could be wrong. But anyways. I loved the poem. It was so well put together and wonderful to read.
xo
kandy -
Welcome to All Poetry !
A beautiful write with such sadness in it. Excellent rhyme and rhythm in this and you emotions came through so well. Great work. Keep writing, reading and commenting.
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Gaylene
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WONDERFUL WRITE. DEFINATELY A JOY TO READ. KEEP PENNIN'
Jasmine -
WOW.This was very nice.KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!!
~Tia~
GOD BLESS
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Love it!
I love this. I beleive every girl feels this way at one time or another. I love the conclusion. How a poem ends is what I like best. It ties into the title nicely too. I can never seem to do that. Nice write. It flows great!
~jen
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hey thankx ldz..means alot
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