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what hurts the most

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The scars on my arms speak louder then my words
From the other room to the one I am in
The walls are closing in
I cant put my finger on it
But there is something  wrong with me
These wounds scream out to me
And hurt even more then the time I put them there.
 

I cant help but think there's something more to life then God has shown us


Being raped and beat and left alone afterwords just wanting to die
Slowly wanting something more in life then pain and hurt
Then the best comes that turns to worst
And that is a child
A beautiful baby boy
Dressed in blue
Run's for his life
And wants nothing more then what his mom has
He wants nothing more then to die and then he does things like cut Himself and burns himself as he has learned from his mom now Both of us are dead from burning ourselve's alive
Because of want his father has done to us before this

written at 7:52
July 1st, 2007

written inspired by Tomas J. Grisbe
Timathy J. Grisbe
and me Dianna L. Green

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written on july 1st

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  • XxLoverOfDarknessxX
    July 28

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    WOAH. this was really good! I loved it! such great emotions as well as fantastic imagery. I loved it! WOW! BRAVO! keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!


  • Antebellum
    July 27
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    The scars on my arms speak louder then my words
    I can relate to this all to well.
    Such a sad, emotional write.
    thank you for taking the time to enter my contest.


  • Blue-Rose Beauty gold member
    March 29
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    I love it.

  • goalsv
    February 5

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    So much feeling of loss, and the pain of being treated as if wothless. Then the feeling of being left alone and passing thse feelings along to your child.


  • debilynn gold member
    July 4, 2007

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    i cannot elaborate any more than bethan-gaze. what she says is everything i would say. my heart goes out to you. from previous conversations you know i believe God will help you if you turn to Him. keep writing honey! it will help God bless you always


  • bethan-gaze
    July 3, 2007

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    This is immensely moving and I have an overwhelming desire to climb into the AP website and reach out and comfort you! But I won't fit!! It is always devastating when we experience bad things and hurtful things ... it makes it very difficult to move on and we often become 'stuck'. Sometimes, writing is cathartic, at other times it helps to talk to either friends or trained Counsellors, or clergy. God sees everything. Absolutely everything ... and He is the best guide as to the healing process. Back to the poem: very dramatic opening which catapults the reader straight into the scene. This then moves on to the finale, so to speak, and how history seems to be repeating itself with the Son. This does not have to be the case (I'm banging my gums again ...). A tender, raw write. Makes me feel as though I'm eavesdropping. Happy to chat with you anytime if you care to elaborate. xx


  • A Leper Messiah
    July 2, 2007
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    Very well done. It's a really sad write. Keep up the great work!


  • ebaby
    July 2, 2007

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    awe serenity... this is so sad, and i know from what we have talked about that this is a fact of happening, keep expressing yourself, and in time dear things will work out, just never ever give up the hope that you can have what you want some day... you just never know whats around the corner for you and your son...


  • Eyes Full of Rain
    July 2, 2007

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    Fantastic

    Again there are a few spelling mistakes butthis hs to be your most amazing piece of work...please tell me one thing though, i hope you have a very well developed dark side or a great imagination and these things are not actually happening to you. I totally agree with silverrose very sd but at the same time it is incredibly destructive. Great story. please reply by giving me your answer. Cheers honey...


  • SilverRose2007
    July 2, 2007
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    great

    it was very sad and powerful.

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