She sits in darkness,
With the world in her hands.
She has everything
That anyone could ever want.
She sits high
In the social ladder peering down at others.
Always obedient, this girl,
As she respects
The wishes of others.
Never one day
Disrespectful.
She has achieved
Both her goals and that of others.
Yet,
She sits alone,
With no one beside her
To share her accomplishments.
She sits alone.
Author notes
tender-butterfly
A contest entry
- Second Chances, the Rounds That Never End (Invite only) [#3] by Lady-Pegasus.
900 points, ended July 21, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i personally still dont think this needed changing as both are good
he he
well done though
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This is wonderful, sometimes being the best is awful lonely, not like i would know..but anyways, great write!
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A beautiful piece...
And a true one at that.
The further we climb up the social ladders, and the further we become successful, the harder it is to have people beside us.. They leave us slowly clinging to the rungs they belong to on that ladder called life..
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thank you for the comment on my work "time" and this one was very well emtionail and i agree poetry is one of mind heart and soul to much focus is on the construct to be forced to stay between the line this one spoke to me very depressing and moveing
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bravo
Lovely, very sad and quite throught provoking all around... deftly and finely done... I like this poem a great deal! bravo... bravo...
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Love the concept of your poem.
Good luck in the contest.
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Thank you for the comment and applause
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Thank you for your contest submission as well as for following the rules. Inspirationally sad and a unique take for the picture. One wonders just how happy the social set really are at times, especaiily those that are alone or tend to become that way often. For me, i ahte being poor but if it meant giving up my belovèd or my family, i would pass with no thought at all! Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors.
Hetohke'e 
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This is a very nice write my favorite lines are :
She sits in darkness,
With the world in her hands.
She has everything
That anyone could ever want
Best wishes
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This poem really brings out the idea that the persona is perfect in every way and yet she's alone. I think this is a good poem. Good luck in the contest.
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