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Afraid to ask

First, you are afraid to ask
Then  when you decided to ask
You don't know how.
When you finally ask,
She doesn't want to answer
She doesn't want to talk about it.
She doesn't want to hear about it.
She doesn't want to live through it again.
She doesn't want to live because of it.
She wants a kid, but she doesn't want a nightmare
That comes with making babies on the cold winter nights
In the warm beautiful apartments filled with male animals
Who look like men, like regular people, like you and me
They are smiling and passing her a glass of expensive wine
Oh, please, drink, drink up to love!  Love is great!
She'll know how great love is in 20 minutes, when drugs will kick in
She'll know that every single handsome man in the room will love her
Love her unconsious young body.  Sharing is caring.  They'll share her,
Cut her like a birthday cake.  Eveyone will get a piece. A piece of what
Used to be HER.  She was me.  Real me, with no price tag on my body.
But don't ask no more stupid question, like : "So what happned next?"
Just look at the junkie standing in front of you

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  • loves toy
    December 6, 2007

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    i can relate very well to this poem because this has happened to me many times!! i am only 17 but i have been through alot in my short life time. i hope that all works out for you!


  • xHeartofDarknessx
    September 21, 2007

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    Very Well Writen
    it was very hard to decided the winner
    but all in all evan though you were all very good
    and hope you will enter my next contest comeing soon
    so i am now saying tank you for takeing part in my first contest
    Kepp up the good work
    Thanks
    xBx

    "In the warm beautiful apartments filled with male animals
    Who look like men, like regular people, like you and me"
    Stood out to me
    very cleaver thanks again
    x


  • Dreams27
    August 16, 2007
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    thank you for entering. this is an interesting piece. take care, sam (Dreams27) xxxx


  • Dead Star--x
    July 31, 2007

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    Cut her like a birthday cake. Eveyone will get a piece. A piece of what
    Used to be HER. She was me. Real me, with no price tag on my body.
    these lines were the most creative and original and fresh i really loved that metaphor btw....
    i couldnt imagine what its like to have the experiance multplyed but i know how easy it is to turn to drugs for an answer-but all you get is more problems and a habbit to kick.... either way nothing is ever easy in this world....
    thanx for entering
    Cure My Tragedy ♥


  • StormGoddess Greeters member
    July 31, 2007

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    Have seen this way too much, and I am sorry you were a personal slave to this hell. It sucks big time. I hope that you have been able to move on, at least somewhat, for I know it is never totally gone.

    Good luck in the contest.

    Storm

  • Acidanthra
    July 26, 2007
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    Thank you for entering. Judging will take place later tonight, while the moon has risen...


  • XxforsakenXhatexX
    July 24, 2007
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    it was good, thanx for entering


  • Exodus gold member
    July 22, 2007

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    I had real trouble reading this.
    But read it I did, you have some interesting metaphors in here, not anything I would have thought of at all.
    I would use a slightly different format, but that's a personal thing. Thank you for entering.


  • The Lost Boy -PP-
    July 21, 2007
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    This is lush.

    There's a push for more,
    And puts me on edge.

    Brava.


  • mourningmonday
    July 16, 2007
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    this made me feel really... low. i can't explain it, but i felt the emotion of this one. good luck!


  • EmmaDilemma93
    July 15, 2007
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    wow great write.. sorry took soo long to comment i had to change my age to read it ='[


  • Wulfareika
    July 13, 2007
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    Wow....this is sick. I don't mean the poem, it's great. Just the subject at hand...the vindictive men who use alcohol and drugs and words of love to lure women into bed and basically rape them. Ugh...But this was well written, I love the repetition of "she doesn't want..." etc. Well done and best of luck in the contest

  • trace3grls
    July 13, 2007
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    good write well done....


  • KateMadness
    July 4, 2007

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    Wow

    I couldn't read this until I changed my age thingy...so..I am lucky I didn't DQ this.

    It's very true and well written and I wish this didn't happen in the world. =P

    Great job and good luck!

  • trace3grls
    July 2, 2007
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    great write so true and honest....


  • alexandrathegreat
    July 1, 2007

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    I like this it's original. It sick what is happening but you turned it into poetry. "cut her like a birthday cake" This line is great. I believe you intended an s on question(s) but no biggie, second to last line. I like the ending as well, memorable. Welcome to the finalist's list.


  • badddgirl
    July 1, 2007

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    Wow, .... WOW

    A piece of what
    Used to be HER. She was me. Real me, with no price tag on my body.
    But don't ask no more stupid question, like : "So what happened next?"
    Just look at the junkie standing in front of you.

    I can relate to the last part of this poem, I hope you really do not consider yourself a JUNKIE, people that get high to forget about the horrible pain caused by a selfish sick act of another being, well, we are called
    only human.


  • shatteredFaith
    June 22, 2007

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    sweety i know how you feel..it's like each person took a piece of you..not a piece that u were willing to give but pieces that were stolen from you..your poem made me go back to when the same happened to me..not a good thing to go back to but this just shows that u put enough detail in here to help us visualize..great job hun..im sorry this happened to you to..if you ever need to talk just know im here for you...


  • purpledragonfly
    June 21, 2007

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    WOW - totally awesome write - yet soooooo sad that it cries



    the last line is just a powerful punch in the gut!
    best luck to you in the contest and in everything else too Betsy

  • trace3grls
    June 21, 2007
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    this is so sad but a great write...

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