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Burned Memories~ Soulful Woman ~ Noreen Agis

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I'm dying in your memory

for I am lost without your presence

I search the dark recesses of my mind

to bring you back, if only for a moment

 

Surrounded by loneliness, I search for a

lonely place, for the companionship of silence

Every sound is a memory related to you

 

I reside in hell

Consumed by fires that burn your name

into my skin

Stoked and fanned by memories

like sins unforgiven

 

I feel you as I close my eyes

and remember your touch

Blinded by tears of loss,

I miss you

 

I will never love again,

I accept that

without anger or bitterness,

or any other emotion

except resignation

 

 

 

 

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  • Janice M Pickett gold member
    September 2, 2007
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    Thanks for this. It has been added
  • angel alone
    August 19, 2007

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    I like the way you portrayed the emotion in this piece, and I like the references and metaphors. Thanks for entering and good luck.

  • esroddo silver member
    July 12, 2007

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    Wow this is so profound and sad. With such intense devotion of love. To love someone without limitation Even after death, It's heartbreaking but at the same time its Soul lifting. This write really touched my heart and soul. (LISA)
    "Consumed by fires that burn your name
    into my skin
    Stoked and fanned by memories
    like sins unforgiven

    I feel you as I close my eyes
    and remember your touch
    Blinded by tears of loss,
    I miss you "


  • Naridill gold member
    June 25, 2007

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    Very interesting and penned well. I love the emotion drawn out within every sentence and the imagery that is brought out. The first few lines are stunners and dragged me in.
    Nicely done.


  • Knight70
    June 23, 2007

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    Wow!

    This is such tragic imagery of a lost love. I admire your work so much.

    I added some photos to a few of my poems. Hopefully, I will be able to upgrade to a gold membership soon. I just love how you set up your homepage. I want to be able to show my creative side more, since it comes naturally to me. My poem, The Storm, has a much better effect now, since I added a good screensaver.


  • Whoochi gold member
    June 23, 2007

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    WOW...OK Is that the 3rd wow i have given you thus far this morning...seriously, love this, am thinking FF would be proud and the cafe bitch would take her gloves and say "Oh don't be so silly dahhhling, tis just a man, Move on" And thats what we shall do, only to replace old memories with newesr, fresher, healthier one...love this line..."Every sound is a memory related to you" So true but am taking the cafe bitchs attitude from now on....

  • eyes stil2dry
    June 22, 2007

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    wow this was very powerful and sad, so descriptive and yet clear at the same time. just, well done, and thanks for commenting on my piece ~xex~

  • Bedroom Eyes
    June 21, 2007

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    Wow...I hope this piece is just your muse speaking. It's dark and filled with pain, but it's very well done. I'd pick a favorite passage, but I like the whole thing.

    As I said...I hope this is just your muse talking

    Good luck in the contest!!!


  • Cerulean gold member
    June 21, 2007

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    "I reside in hell
    Consumed by fires that burn your name
    into my skin
    Stoked and fanned by memories
    like sins unforgiven" = JUST WOW!


  • soulfultia gold member
    June 21, 2007

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    This was a very deep emotional piece, much deeper than first appearance and brilliantly penned! Dark and Lonely was gripping me. Lovely work from you ~Tia

  • DestinedLove6879
    June 20, 2007

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    wow i love this. it's wonderful. it's one of the best poems i've ever read. i wish i could write like this. great write.

  • darrylblacksr
    June 20, 2007

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    This poem is very deep with a lot of meaning to it. For in a way I can understand not being able to love another person, Because you gave your all to the one you love and noone else would do... Thank you for sharing this with me and god bless in your challenge...


  • Jeremy0826 gold member
    June 20, 2007

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    Wow, this is really deep.
    It's a terrible feeling when you feel
    you will never be able to fall in love
    again. Life is so short and you never
    know what happiness and inspirations
    you may find in the arms of another.
    Being in a relationship can truly turn
    your life around and is something that
    one should never do without. Don't ever
    give up on love, people in your life,
    and most of all yourself. Great work
    with this one my friend! I really enjoyed
    reading this and think you did a wonderful
    job with it! Thanks a lot for sharing it
    and best of luck to you with it in the contest!





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