She's holding the future in her hand
this World's destiny in a chrystal ball
But looking at her sweet, sad face
She doesn't like this future at all
I wonder what she's looking at
Could be the fighting of men at war
or maybe she's listening to the sound
of the almost extinct tiger's roar
Perhaps she's watching nature's anger
displayed in storms, destroying land
or she's following the transformation
of fertile soil into dessert sand
There's so much water on this earth
but still too many die of thirst
and we pay millions, just to find out
who hits the ball, who'll end up first
We complain when our car breaks down
or when it rains on our expensive suit
We shouldn't complain at all you know
when we are holding the biggest loot
That's what I see in this girl's face
a sadness about World's destiny
I like to think, she'll step in one day
to change our mind and set us free
Author notes
JustADutchie
In a list
A contest entry
- Second Chances, the Rounds That Never End (Invite only) [#3] by Lady-Pegasus.
900 points, ended July 21, 2007, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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WoW
i will be looking forward to read more of your poetry.
Keep it up.
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BANDITS UNITED!
A compelling read, I wish we could see the Earth's destiny in a crystal ball, because I think it would show how dangerously close we are to losing it...
You have penned some powerful lines, you seem to be skilled at drawing the reader into your words...I loved the imagery but most of all the message within this write
~Lilac
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Bandits United!!
Wow~ Powerful piece penned which brings forth many thoughts to the surface~
Gives much to contemplate Earth's fate~
Thank You for sharing this!
Wonderful weaving of words
Many blessings to You
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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BANDITS UNITED
The great debated question destiny. Some say we choose our destiny. Others think our life is preplan from birth. There so many questions about faith and chance. I agree with you. No matter how it said or presented.
She doesn't like this future at all.
I think many are having concerns about it. As you pointed out we worry about trivial things. That someday will not matter. Global warming is here there people pretending that it does not effect us or them. If it keep warming at this rate there going to be some dire times. I like the way you wrote. I am glad to see that share concerns about this world.
This is very well done. Keep up the wonderful work.
Sorry that I was late.
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BANDITS UNITED!!
(sorry I'm late.)
This is great- the rhyme, the meter. It really is quite a readable poem- not too much ambiguity. I don't know if I like that, but it certainly works for you. I think I see a pattern in having your spotlight after mine...my poem was about the depravity of humanity on a single person, now we see yours, and it's of the depravity of humanity on a grand scale! The one thing that I can't figure out (which is good, I like to think about things) is the character of the woman watching. Is she some sort of aspect of a god, or God, or maybe even a god herself? And it says that she can step in to help...so why the heck doesn't she? This was an interesting read. Thanks so much for penning such a frank view of the world. You're such a great poet, do keep it up.
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BANDITS UNITED: THIS IS YOUR DAY IN THE SPOTLIGHT! ENJOY! Good rhythm and rhyme in these lines - easy to read and understand what you are saying here.
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BANDITS UNITED !!
Good reflective write on the condition of this world and the many rich, blessed and unappreciative persons that inhabit this earth. We need to count our blessings and help those less fortunate and perhaps this lovely and sad Angel will have something to smile about.
Solid rhyme and good flow and good imagery in this thoughtful poem.
(note: in line two you used the word chrystal, I believe it is usually spelled crystal)
Good Stuff...BANDITS ROCK!
Dennis
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BANDITS UNITED !!
This is a very well written poem with fgreat rhyme and such an important and true message! I am so glad this poem is being spotlighted today, it really was a joy to read and it made me think.
Thank you for sharing this!
Keep on writing!
Annie
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Bandits United!
Lovely piece, great rhythm and flow and the sentiments are well expressed with gratitude and care. Excellent piece. Loved it
Hugs, Bunny
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Bandits United!!!
This is a wonderful poem! I believe we should be a lot more grateful and appreciative than we are, we do complain way too much. very well done!
peace
Debbera
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Bandits United
Sorry for got the applause forgot the title thing too. Sorry.
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Love the picture with this poem. It is very lovely poem you have a great thing here. Rhythm and rhyme are very nice. Great job and great message keep it up.
Never give up
Kate -
Bandits United!
what a great anthem, so excellent imagery and a very smooth flow, also a very poigent message.
well done poet
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BANDITS UNITED
This my anthem! Very nicely written and very bittersweet. I can remember the earth 50 years ago, the difference now is astounding - and disheartning.
Looking forward to more of your work!
Wolfie
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Bandits United!
The 5th stanza is so true. We like to complain about how hard we have it, when we are bloody rich compared to so many. Nice rhythm and rhyme to your poem!
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bandits united
Interesting piece. Made me think of judgement day. Perhaps that's what she's looking at. Enjoyed your rhymes.
Enjoy your day in the spotlight.
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Bandits Unite!!!
Another beautiful write Dutchie. I think you have a very nice style within your write and yes, I loved the picture! I agree with you, this world isn't always as happy and good as we would wish it to be... But we have to hold onto the ones who mean the most to us! Love always and keep writing like you do!
x Stef x
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BANDITS UNITED!!!
what a great poem about humanity. You have made many compelling points throughout. I so agree with your words. this poem grips you and carries you through. thank you for sharing this. keep writing! God bless you always
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BANDITS UNITED! yes!
Pure enchantment flowing and sparkling and telling us how we might improve our lives and take care of our Earth! What a beautiful poem you have written... makes me glad! 
We should all take note of your advice!
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Bandits United
That's what I see in this girl's face
a sadness about World's destiny
I like to think, she'll step in one day
to change our mind and set us free
Very searching poem
Great theam
Rick
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Bandits United
A lovely poem right from the start the words flow with ease and a grandstand imagery the soft tones makes this a very enjoyable read ~ You have a great day in the spotlight...
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Bandits United!
Wow such a beautiful poem about humanity. You have made some many compelling points throughout. I so agree with your logic. Excellent flow and imagery. I love the picture to
Enjoy your day today in the spotlight
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Captivating
Well done.
You have done a great job with this picture.
Best of luck in the contest.
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oops forgot the demented bunnies!
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Thank you for your contest submission as well as for following the rules. WOW you ahve perfectly captured exactly what i was hoping for inthis contest, thank you! Two brief areas of technical stuff and knowing the language barrier i will tell you this here before judging:
"Or she's following the changing faster"
perhaps
"... following the too-fast changes"
or even just making it "faster changes".
Also I think you changed the extinct that was suggested below but not the crystal one.
Overall wonderfully done with just those few areas needing refining is all!
Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e 
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Passionate
You've really hit home on some major world issues in this write. There are a few typos I notice that you may want to fix. "crystal" and "extinct" are the proper forms for your poem. Hope this helps, Good luck!
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Thanks for your comment and for pointing out my typos. Always difficult, when English is not your native language, to get it all right.
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