The birds are arguing.
Over
belief
and words
and meanings
and what things are meant to mean.
They wear different shades of
dead set black and white.
They are having a war of words
though an uncaring sky.
And if their words were bullets, it would be raining blood right now.
Author notes
Why can't everyone just get along and accept that other people aren't ever going to change their beliefs just cause you disagree with what they think?
Option 5
A contest entry
- Options!!! by A Poet Named Kyoto.
1050 points, ended August 4, 2007, 37 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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Wonderful piece. I love how you use birds in the poem, It has great flow and you displayed wonderful word choice.
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Please add the option in your Author notes, I will be glad to comment once this is done!
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First, let me say that I think birds imparticular, are a powerful symbol in alot of wonderful poetry. Birds such as ravens, crows and vultures have such powerful connotations, especially when one takes the time and effort to research and understand the folkloric meanings behind each speicies of bird. For this reason, I was initially drawn to your poem.
Aside from your use of the bird symbol, I love the use of simplistic, almost childish and deliberately innocent phrasing you use: "and meanings
and what things are meant to mean" is really powerful yet simple. The final line in particular haunting, and very evocative. I really like this poem, I think you've done a good job. Keep up the good work.
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You have expressed yourself very well here,we all have our different beliefs and cultures and we should just accept them,after all we are all connected as we are all Gods children, you may feel free to check out my poetry,I have written a few on world peace...Great write...Hazel
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Good job. I really like this one.
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I read though as through for a better meaning in this fine little free verse parable about understanding. The metaphor to cawing birds was effective to show that people are the same just seem to dwell on their differences... well written, creative, and economy of words..well done...PK
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