When cold wind blows and sprays on winter shore
my thoughts in bluster scatter out to sea
and all the while my mind tries to ignore
how they return in ocean washed debris.
My tears with mingled mist somehow decree
that I should carry on without you there
and missing you brings prayer on bended knee;
"Relinquish me from days wracked with despair."
Though frost of white does hold me unaware
of you, a vision blessed on angel wing;
who pushes me to thaw in warmer air,
releasing me with song of coming spring.
And with the tide that pulls to tug each start
you wash my sand to gift me with my heart.
Copyright © 2007
Pamela A. Lamppa
(All Rights Reserved)
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A contest entry
- BATTLE OF THE SONNETS ROUND 3 by mamad.
750 points, ended July 3, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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You submerge these lines in the depths of the ocean.
The imagery is constant yet it does not flood the element of longing and the metaphor of love. Blue
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Blue Rew
Thank you so much. I find sonnet very difficult and have learned so much in this contest. I am sure there is still much more to learn, but I was pleased with this piece and I am glad you are too. Thank you so much. The sea sings to the spirit of my soul. It always has. Thank you again. ~Pamela
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wow- this is perfect- perfect is starting to sound cliche- cause I am calling all these poems in this contest perfect- what do I mean by that? Is it the skill in the poem, or is there also deep and meaningful character behind this too? I think it's both. You guys are absolutely amazing.
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Duana
Thank you so much for your kind words of support. I appreciate them so much. ~Pamela
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With gentle nudge of understanding comes release..Such a way you have with these sonnets my friend. I am a little confused at the difference between the English and Spenserian but find so much beauty in each one that you compose.
Such a wonderful message held within these soulful words.
Always I find a touch of elegance on your page.
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~lk~
Thank you so much.
I am falling in love with sonnet and want to learn to write really good ones. I have to keep practicing . I am so pleased for your comment here and popped you an IM on the differences. Thank you my dear friend. ~Pamela
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I like this one too Pamela. I think even more than the last one. Wishing you good luck with the contest.
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passm
Thank you. I kind of liked this one better too. Thank you so much.
~Pamela
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musical, good to read aloud.
You have a gift of writing with a beautiful flow as the words roll from the tongue in musical language. A sad subject, but written with such beauty to make it all sound magical. I envy your ability with words.
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R S Adams Jr
Thank you so much for such a lovely comment on my piece. I appreciate it very much. ~Pamela
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I saw you inspired Eusebius to write one of these and so I stopped in to check yours out. It's interesting how this form evokes the sea with its repetitious, wave-like rhyme scheme. I liked the rhymes in this and the line about "releasing me with song of coming spring," especially. All the best, Pamela.
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Can you believe one of my sonnets would inspire such an awesome writer? I was floored. He has taught me so much! I am pleased you enjoyed this piece. I have learned so much about sonnets in this contest with a ton more to learn I am sure. Thank you so much. ~Pam
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very nice sonnet! you write such beautiful sonnets, your like... my sonnet hero! =)
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alivefromlove
A sonnet hero? LOL. You are funny and what a rookie you have picked for your hero. I have learned so much about sonnet in this contest with I am sure much much more to learn. I am so pleased you enjoyed this. Now you try one. 
Thank you again. ~Pamela
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this is beautiful!
Sad in its struggle but hopeful; like love reborn to cleans the past. I love this !!
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Ken
Thank you so much. I have learned so much about sonnet in this rounds contest. WHEW. Brain boggling but oh they can be so beautiful. Thank you for stopping to read this one. I am so pleased you did. ~Pam
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Such beauty
Pamela, you have the elements and nature at your beck and call. Your writes are always so liquid. And I like how in many writes you go through several emotions in one write. That makes it real to me. Great job and good luck in the contest.
Brian
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Brian
Thank you so much. What a wonderful comment. I appreciate it very much. ~Pamela
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breathtaking... this is so beautifully written.
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going nowhere
Thank you so much. ~Pamela
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Excellent pam, you have written this with great flow and imagery! I loved reading this. i wish you all the best in this contest! This was superb!
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Kiran
Thank you so much for your wonderful comment. I appreciate it very much. ~Pamela
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bravo
It is so rare to see a Spenserian sonnet! (Spenser and Shakespeare were contemporaies, he became a tad more famous) an excellent sonnet!!! bravo... bravo... bravo...
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Eusebius
Thank you so much Michael. I am so very pleased for your comment here.
~Pamela
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read and scored
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