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The Death of Admiral Isoroku Yamamoto

I fly over the blue South Pacific,
to lift up the morale of my warriors.
This war seems  endless,
a bloody wastage and useless.
I told Tokyo not to fight this war,
but to my words they didn’t give any ear.
“Americans! Americans”. Shouted my pilot.
Eighteen American fighters,
are coming towards my bombers.
They are determined and a proud nation,
I knew from my Harvard years.
We woke up the sleeping giant.
Now the giant will kill me,
because  I am their number one enemy.
I hold my Samurai sword strong,
I will not let it go if anything goes wrong.
Two bullets enter my body,
and my body starts bleeding.
My plane starts losing its height,
and  with me it is going down. 

Author notes

Isoroku Yamamoto (4 April 1884 – 18 April 1943) was a Fleet Admiral and Commander-in-Chief of the Combined Japanese Fleet during World War II, graduate of Imperial Japanese Naval Academy and an alumnus of U.S. Naval War College and Harvard University (1919–1921).
Source: Wikipedia
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Isoroku_Yamamoto

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  • Leaving Today
    July 9, 2007
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    Your poem gives me lesson about History


  • manoguru
    June 25, 2007
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    you still haven't changed the "enemey". it should be "enemy"

    i said in the 2nd rule of the contest not to use end-rhyme. but here you have used them. however, they are occasional; so i will overlook them.

    i think that the poem is very ambitious, in that it tries to capture the mentality of a real-life war commander. i read the article on wikipedia link that you tagged to your author's note. and judging by the life of this man, i don't think he would have regreted waging a war with the US, which your poem makes it sound. but you are a poet, and you have your poetic license.

    technically speaking, the poem evokes a mixed reaction from me, because you have tried to write a narrative which is not so subtle in its depiction the character and banally didactic. surely you can do better than that. please consider revising this poem; and when you do, do please notify me.

    ~manoguru


  • manoguru
    June 20, 2007

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    i spotted a few spelling mistakes. i'm sure "bloddy" is supposed to be 'bloody' and 'enmey' is supposed to be 'enemy'.

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