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Learning is like a moth

Empty and confused
Fluttery
Uncertain
As to which direction to go
Blinded by the light
Giving up would be so easy
If not shown a clear path
And pushed onwards
Guided by the light
As things come clearer
Moving away from the dark
Which clutched with empty,
Unreasonging fingers
Deterred by the light
Becoming the light
Out of the darkness and into the light

Author notes

yeah... I don't particularly actually like this poem, but I wrote it for a competition. It's... rather bad. And i'm not just saying that. If I liked i, i'd say.
So don't comment. please.

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  • Pippin-and-Merry
    June 1, 2008
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    I love it and I love you


  • grannyeri gold member
    March 29, 2008
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    Think if you don't like a poem, you should remove it, but I like the rant style you wrote here - sentiments well expressed and the metaphor you used here - think the title certainly suits the info in the poem as well. Thanks for commenting on Comment Please - have a good evening.