Our simple minds
cannot grasp
our tangled inventions.
Who do we reject,
ourselves or the facade?
Author notes
Hundreds of years and books of discovery condensed to 5 lines.
A contest entry
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650 points, ended July 3, 2007, 38 entries
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great
simply great. says absolutely everything in just 5 lines. wow
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Indeed.
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Welcome to AllPoetry
A very good question you have posed a masquerade of intelligence and numbness of sorts. This poem has me thinking now. Nicely done! I’d like to take this opportunity to welcome you to the sight, if you have any questions or concerns please feel free to contact any greeter or simply click on the help tab at the top of the screen.
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Well I have to look up Facade it a deceptive building St. Paul Cathedral is an example of it form. I am not sure if you mean building or deception. I agree our simple minds can not grasp the tangle web of inventions. Now farmers use GPS to plant some of the Gps can tell when corn needs to be water. GPS is a young technology that is growing in the community of technology which was use for military, then came to the civilians. Reason why we have highways is for the military application. Many of these inventions have improve life. We as a people are losing our skills to live off the land. With global warming starting. How is going to effect our current life style? Our electric company is bulging more systems to deliver electricity to the consumer. What will be the impact to global warming. I do not know. This write stirs up many ideas for the reader. It made me think about how the inventions over the years effect us. To be honest I do not know if I got the full grasp of the write. Five simple lines are complex in nature. Who do we reject ourselves or the facade? This is a question for the reader to answer. Some writer answer their questions others leave it for the reader. It well done write.
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Great poem!
Seriously aweome!
Goodluck in my contest! -
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Thanks a lot, glad you like it!
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Excellent
EXCELLENT. This is fantastic. I fear some people may not understand it though. A write whose pleasures are reserved and subtle, but possess a certain gravity about it. Great write. Keep evolving!!!
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