Beautiful, calm, collected
Is the mask I've erected
Deep within I draw my strength
To face another day at length
To wear the mask is to hide the face
Of the one who is a disgrace
So I take the painting brush
And with it my identity I hush
The swollen eyes and red cheeks
Hidden away from painful critiques
Behind the soft pale facade
With a peachy smile, big and broad
Ripped apart by lies and hate
Of which so many can relate
But no one is willing to say it will be OK
That I, myself, can face another day
So hidden behind salvation
That of which is my creation
Is where I will reside
And from the world will I hide
Author notes
Option number four
A contest entry
- Masked, humanities solace: Abstract #3 by Electric Sunrise.
700 points, ended July 7, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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not bad
this poem is very touching for me. its worded very intently and the message is clear. but that last rhyme in the third stanza, it sounds really forced. other than that i have no complaints about this poem. it just screamed "read me, read me" you cant ask for better than that.
Rob
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ummmm a piece in which I understand what you can saying, many of us feel the need to hide the real feelings we experience from the rest of the world. But many people don't realize is that there are people who can see far beyond the fake simper. Good, effective writing here, im quite impressed!
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bravo
Well and most ably done with some very fine meter throughout...liked it muchly! bravo... bravo... bravo...
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Lovely rhyming scheme here, paced well, nice AA BB structure, coherent throughout, nice strong imagery, an excellently crafted piece, thanks for your entry and best of luck
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hiperkid411
i like this...=P
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