No one is here to help me now.
The sheild around me only grows stronger..
As I drift into eternal slumber...
The blood around me puddles up....
As I wish I was warm in my bed...
Snuggling up close to you..
Im my dreams you want me too...
Now I'm closer to the floor
than ever before as i fall farther down.
I realize that I love this town..
that I forsook so long ago..
Just because they treated me like dust..
They blew me away that ill never forget...
I even got a few threats...
But as my eyes close forever...
I figure..
This is Better.
A contest entry
- Horrific - love (shock me) by whispering shadow.
450 points, ended August 3, 2007, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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tha as good and i send my luck in my contest
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The last line really brought this poem home for me. It helped me to relate, and I'm sure it's helped others to relate too. Nice work, and thanks for adding to the reading list. The emotion in this piece was very clear, but still poetic.
~CharlotteRose~
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Great poem.
Good luck in the contest! -
wow
this is a great piece
good luck
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thanks!!
^.^
Thanks for the bronze!!
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Just because they treated me like dust..
They blew me away that ill never forget...
excellent line darling...
This is short, but its really good..
:-)
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Impresive
Yes indeed... very nicely done! And the rhyme too... it takes you far away into the poem and the reality itself!
Keep up the good work! ^^ <3
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