When rose petals float upon forbidden bursts of blue
the winds whispered colors of hope~
Only to be scorched later by realities waves
crashing them against the shore
Wilted into deception upon the sand
drained of all their beauty,
a salty mist cascades in empathy around me,
seizing my thoughts
I am waltzing through echoes of a merciless world
darkened by shadows,
as this ruse of impressions leaves behind deep footprints
upon my hearts journeys
Lurking like crystal memories
an image,
my reflection~
reveals itself in the dried petals left scattered
My life;
frozen between syllables of thoughts,
overwhelmed with sorrow,
my soul crumbles
in silken wishes of tears,
as stars softly fade away my dreams
Suddenly, I am left wandering~
Alone,
with tainted remnants of yesterday,
left upon the sand
Author notes
Option One:
wilted into deception
tainted remnants of yesterday
forbidden bursts of blue
waltzing through echoes
frozen between syllables
in silken wishes
as stars softly fade
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A contest entry
- For The Creative At Heart...... by poet2angels.
725 points, ended June 24, 2007, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Excellent
Very descriptive and passionate poem. So deserving of the gold.
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"my soul crumbles
in silken wishes of tears,
as stars softly fade away my dreams"
How very sad are these words. There seems to be a feeling of being worn in these words. Your poetry flows with the smoothest ease, as if each line has its own moment to savor thought. This is a beauteous work of poetry.
Lynda's contests are incredible. I have never read your works before her introduction. I am happy to have met you through your beautiful words. Exceptional work here!
Congratulations on earning the Gold!
Much Love & Respect ♥
Renee
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Congradulations on first prize, wonderful write.
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You deserved the gold...sure did!This is amazing.
Really sad too.
I like your way of expressions and the imagery.You painted a very vivid picture.I loved this
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WOW
What a poem so rich in graphic imagery. I was blown away by the trip my senses were taken on. I only wish I could write with as much intensity and sophistication as I see before me here. Outstanding! What more can one say?
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Thank you!!
Hello PureCounty
Such a wonderful and inspiring compliment you have given my poem!! Thank you so very much!!
I am so happy that you found this to be so enjoyable!!!
And a special thank you for the "wow" .. as it made me smile even bigger
Jasminerose
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Outstanding
frozen between syllables of thoughts,
overwhelmed with sorrow,
I loved those lines - this poem just seemed to get better and better as I read it, you created a rich tapestry of language and I liked the flow of words. This is a poem full of melancholy and sadness, beautiful to read and full of vivid imagery. I'm not surprised this was a gold trophy winner.
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Good Evening Rooms
I am so sorry as I tried the other day to reply and kept getting that darn error message.. but back today to say.. Thank you so very much for such a lovely compliment on my poem. Your thoughts are always wonderful to hear and most appreciated!!!
So delighted to read that you enjoyed this so!
Thank you
Linda
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It isn't often that we can come across a poem that just leaves us utterly speechless; and the words that can be found to estimate the worth of their beauty - just don't seem to capture the depths of it all... This is so beautiful. Very sad, endearing, and truly poignant. Great use of metaphor woven within. This reader is left mesmerized. Thank you so much for your entry & Best wishes in the contest!
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Thank You!!
Dear Wendy
Thank you so very much for your lovely compliment on my entry! Your words mean a great deal to me and have made writing and entering a contest like this most rewarding!
Thank you so very much for co hosting and honoring me with a gold. I can't tell you what it means to me in mere words. Other than, thank you from the bottom of my heart.
Jazzy
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I'll be back with a proper comment when I can get past the lump in my throat and quit choking on the tears...
All the best, Jazzy
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Thank you!
Awwww sweet Sandy
I am sorry I got you all choked up and really no need for any further comment as that was plenty
Thanks hon
Jazzy
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so beautiful
this poem is so beautiful written. This is so out-standing. -
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Thank you!!
Hi Maggie
Thank you so very much for such a wonderful compliment on my poem!!! It is very nice to hear you thoughts on my poetry!!
Thank you!
Linda
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This is gorgeous penning...I love the imagery; it's very serene, and gives that feeling of contemplation. It's amazing the power the sea/lake (depending where you are ) has over the soul. Excellent penning. Good luck in the contest...though, this seems like a sure winner to me
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Thank You!!
Awww Jersene,
You always know just what to say to bring my heart a smile
Thank you so much for the lovely compliment!!! You are so very sweet to me
Jazzy
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beautiful
My dear friend, you have written another masterpiece, so beautiful and flawless...
"My life;
frozen between syllables of thoughts,
overwhelmed with sorrow,
my soul crumbles
in silken wishes of tears,
as stars softly fade away my dreams"
You did a wonderful job with the phrase bank, Jazzy!
Gorgeous poem!
Lynda
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Thank you !
Thank you so very much Lynda
I am so delighted that you enjoyed this one so! The phrase bank was quite the challenge but you know me... I love a good one!
Thank you so very.. very much for the lovely gold trophy and the generous points! My smile has just gotten bigger today!!!
Love Jazzy
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Very nice job relating life to the picture. Almost could feel the storm moving in while reading. Best of luck in the contest.
Eric
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Thank you!
Thank you Eric for such a wonderful comment and the applauses on my poem
Linda
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What a nice poem to read in the early morning! Your poetry is simply blossoming and I am happy to see that I was first to read it and to comment it. This poems looks much better than a picture from above, you can frame it as well. Bravo my dear friend.
~Sonja~
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