Confusion
Unable to think straight
Pain
Knowing it’s too late
Broken
Filled with self hate
Alone
Awaiting my fate
I rip myself apart inside
Knowing what I did to you
My actions I cannot deny
To my word I was untrue
An enemy within
I did not know exists
Not sure that I can win
As pangs of guilt persist
(My body screams again
As my mind resists)
A tiny seed of agony
Grows within my soul
It burns deep down inside of me
Transforms my heart to coal
…
Torture
I know it well
But what I did
Feels worse than hell
I can’t express in words alone
Intense compassion you have shown
Yet one small thing can spoil trust
Until there’s nothing left but dust
I’m drowning in my sinful action
But what hurt most was your reaction
What I have done I can’t undo
I hate myself for hurting you…
I’m so sorry
Please forgive me
Please tell me what you think
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very good
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this would make a GREAT song. i love the beginning and the emotion throughout.
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Thanks
This was a personal poem and written through some tears so it's real emotion.
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dang...
This hit deep...the last to stanzas were the best- how you ended it, it really re-enforced everthing...really sad stuff here, this was one of those poems where I got the 'punched in the gut' feeling at the end...which means the poem was defnitely good! excellent write!
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This was entirely heart felt. I made a mistake and regretted it immediately. This was a minor mistake too, if only I'd written about my latest one...
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Awwww this was bittersweet. This is a wonderful poem here, and I really think that each of us can relate to how you feel because all of us have needed to say it at some point.
Well done
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filled with emotion
This is a very raw & powerful write; I especially liked the lines:
An enemy within
I did not know exists...
nicely penned & full marks... d(david)
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mistakes are the building blocks of experience. Without mistakes how would we learn to overcome... with out mistakes we would always be left asking what coulda been. Risking can be difficult and often times downright painfull... but the reason you go for "it" in the first place is this simple idea we all hold fast to... you hope that "it" (whatever it is) will be worth the effort and pain. What you dont know when you start is that what you learn from falling is more important than what you learn from perfection.
by the way this is absolutely fantastic poetry. I havnt been able to write something this emotional since my last hearbreak... thanks for stirring old sparks.
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well I did learn from this mistake and managed to smooth things over. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece so much, thanks for reading and commenting on my work
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Its ok I forgive you. lol. this was really great tho. i really liked it. as most of yur poems ive read. your really good from what i can see. keep it up
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Absolutely stunning
You took your emotions and painted them into the perfect picture, Where one could see and feel the pain the anger the anguish, Leaving the stains that you've hidden to finally come out and show them selfs to the world of your peers, Brilliantly penned thank you for sharing this amazing poem with us here on ap I'll be back to read more...
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wow thank you so much. I'm flattered you liked it so well. This was very personal and a bit difficult to write.
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this was a very moving poem, sister, very emoitional....good job...
you have to forgive yourself first, no matter what else, or that tiny seed you speak of will consume you and you'll change for the worse...no matter what it is you've done, it's not worth hating yourself...we all make mistakes, we're only human -
This is so full of emotion, you did a great job with the rhym scheme. I hope that you found forgivness, whoever you were seeking it from, to ease your suffering. No one should have to suffer pain.
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I'm pretty sure he has forgiven me. But I'll never forgive myself. Just another mistake I must suffer the consequences for.
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ahhh... this was a great peice!!! i really like the beginning... the rhymes were just perfect!! i cant even say how much emotion this poem contains....
really good job!!!
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