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Solidarity's Tale

We all know how it is
to be the only one staring.
Reaching up to the stars,
when the real prize
is buried beneath our feet.
Though don’t forget
the grace you discovered
in the feeling.

Being one,
individual
unique.

Finger out the light
from the sky you searched through,
be willing to combine
knowledge with thought.

And never again be afraid
to find beauty
were no one as seen it before.

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Inspired by this photo:
http://www.deviantart.com/print/790823/

peace to all ~flight

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  • Ryno
    June 21, 2007

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    Powerful piece, with astonishingly addictive and bold insight; almost demanding of us to feel the same way. "Though don’t forget" maybe you could take out though, it is kind of a a filler word. And in the last line I think you mispelt where. Wonderful job on this though. Best luck.


    Ryan


  • sweetpearl
    June 20, 2007

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    This was an excellent piece and I love what you captured from the photo you used. I really love how there was a rhyme there but drawn out, it probably wasn't intended but nonetheless I liked it (that being "feet" and "unique"). But feet is still lingering on your tongue so that's why the rhyme works.

    "Finger out the light
    from the sky you searched through"

    --using "finger" here was superb. I'm glad you chose it. These lines are flawless.

    "And never again be afraid
    to find beauty
    were no one as seen it before"

    --this ending was exquisite. I am really glad you entered. When I find someone else who likes to see beauty in things no one else can find it in, I smile. A great write.


    • flight
      June 20, 2007
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      Thank you for your very encouraging comment,
      I appriciate it!
      peace to all ~flight


  • Vernal
    June 19, 2007

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    And again I'm struck by the beauty of this poem.

    "We all know how it is
    to be the only one staring.
    Reaching up to the stars,"
    Hehe. This made me giggle since you're reaching up as opposed to to the floor as the woman in the picture.

    "Finger out the light
    from the sky you searched through,
    be willing to combine
    knowledge with thought."
    Yummmmmmmmmmmmm, that's a fantastic stanza, just like the rest of the piece. Thank you so much for entering.

    • flight
      June 20, 2007
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      Thank you so much for your comment!
      Yeah, I did the reaching up instead of reaching down
      for this, it seemed right though
      Thanks again!
      peace to all ~flight

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