Killed me with a fantasy
That clearly wouldn't ever be.
Devoured in a fuzzy dream;
So false, the truth I should've seen.
I break apart with every word.
Divert your eyes so YOU aren't hurt.
Don't care for me, I will be fine...
(There goes my "Once upon a time...")
It feels like water consumes me,
Like I am sinking in the sea.
I send no flares, I don't scream loud.
I'm doomed-- I know I'm going down.
[You held my hand] (You let it go)
[You promised me](Each promise: Broke)
[You said you loved me](Now, you don't.)
[You said you'd hold me](Now you won't.)
I'm losing air, it's hard to breathe;
The water's creeping up on me.
Each breath I take may be my last...
(I'm going down... I'm sinking fast.)
I thought that you would care for me,
But now it is so clear
You never even loved me,
You just broke my heart and left me here.
I'm sure I'm gonna sink below
-- there's nothing I can do.
I'm running out of oxygen...
(It's all because of you.)
Author notes
=] Thanks for reading.
A contest entry
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wow
i really liked the flow and unique way of how you've written this poem.you are so talented ;Thank you for entering my contest and goodluck.
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Very lyrical these lines - different the way you used [], and then centralized this poem.
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I really liked this piece. You have shown a unique voice. Well done.
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