How often have we watched the setting sun
and waited breathless for a bright new day?
And did we count our blessings one by one
or take for granted all that came our way?
Complaining that it’s work for little pay;
expecting extra time for having fun.
While simply to survive, some people pray;
they’re parched and hungry, blistered by the sun.
Why say this world belongs to everyone
when some of us just take the lions share?
It’s time to recognise what’s going on
that what we have, for some’s beyond compare.
Will our tomorrow be the brightest yet
or will the sun be gone, no more to set?
Author notes
Spenserian Sonnet
In a list
A contest entry
- BATTLE OF THE SONNETS ROUND 3 by mamad.
750 points, ended July 3, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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You really like your Sonnets don't you? I can see why, you do them very well indeed. Great job...Scott
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Excellent
This is a nice sonnet, thoughtful and well written with great flow and insight. Best of luck in the contest.
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This is just wonderful!
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Good thoughts, gratitude is an appropriate frame of mind. The sonnet form is well done. Best of luck!
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for now!
Linda
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read and scored
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Wow
Oh I did like this one a great deal. Very nicely done. Making me ponder that question you ask last....
Well done. ~Pamela
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Very nice. I have nothing but praise, no suggestions. There are a couple of slants, a couple of bumps, but overall this is a very nice mesh of meter, rhyme, and message. Putting a poem aside and coming back to it after a few days can give a fresh perspective, a little more willingness to clip away the good parts that aren't quite good enough, so that you end up with something that works as well as this poem. Nicely done.
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A really wonderful Spenserian Sonnet both in its craft and in its content, which really strikes a chord with me. Best of luck in the contest with this marvelous poem.
David Michaels
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