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Dream With Me

I want to lay down upon a cloud

and gently float away
Away from all the stress
that accumulates each day

Then close my weary eyes
and dream of being where
my prayers would all be answered
if only I were there

Float past the horizon
where time doesn't matter anymore
Past stars and another galaxy
too far away to explore

To the outer edge of Heaven
where peace just overflows
Soothing my burdened spirit
until I feel a healing glow

Where no pain can exist
all despair has been erased
Enshrouded in pure love
where imperfections are embraced

Lay down upon my cloud
and dream this dream with me
If only for a little while

our spirits can be free

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JeannieD http://allpoetry.com/user/show/JeannieD

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  • onerios13
    July 8, 2007

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    This was lovely, and although not exactly what we asked for in the contest, I'm still glad that you entered it as it's a sweet and soft way of looking at the brighter side of life. Thanks for entering.

  • Nicole Hanna
    June 19, 2007

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    Thank you very much for your name and a link in the author notes. I didn't know how many people would see that. lol. However, the only thing we didn't ask for was abab quatrain rhyme. Other form poetry is perfectly acceptable, this form just happens to escape our personal tastes, for whatever reason. Though I give you major applause for such a stellar meter in the first two stanzas, particularly. The ending is also very soft and inviting and there's nothing to read here that stresses me out and makes me think too hard on depressing things. lol. I enjoyed that about the piece.


    • JeannieD Hunter gold member
      June 20, 2007
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      Thanks for the comment, I do appreciate it. Should I remove because of the form? I can't do other kinds, so I tend to do this type mainly. I don't mind removing, it is your contest. Thanks.

      Jeannie

      • Nicole Hanna
        June 20, 2007
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        It's definitely up to you. We wont be removing any pieces from the contest ourselves.

  • June-bug
    June 19, 2007

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    Beautiful

    Be sure to bring your cloud by, so beautiful and peaceful. Makes the spirit want to soar..Past the horizon to the heavens..and beyond. Beautiful


    • JeannieD Hunter gold member
      June 19, 2007
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      Be right there! Should pick up Mook too, but she is soaring on her own!! Thanks June.


  • dustookie2
    June 19, 2007

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    I wanna go there too hun sounds just right for the good bad girls toe recover when in retreat Beautiful imagery you guide me through the words and i am there floating free with love in my heart smiling as i swim amongst the clouds. This is just a treasure write of peace and calm with a comfort in the message. Very inspirational hun I thank you for the pleasure. good luck in the contest


  • smiley
    June 19, 2007

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    Loving It

    Where no pain can exist
    all despair has been erased
    Enshrouded in pure love
    where imperfections are embraced

    this is the stanza that says it all...

    Yvonne

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