Said before in the same idea
and whatnot I believed it too
Repeated words, screaming happy vengeance
Whispers shrivel and eruptions conclude this business
Like I could ever really feel what others so instantaneously offer
From fingertips to plasma rays venting dead brain tissue through my blood
And I want to sing the words that I've never really felt
But OH! I want it just too fucking much.
Yeah it's just that kind of need and it won't dissipate
Like the contact of a close embrace...of which I have been so deprived
I'll repeat and dance around in circles again and again in a grotesque fashion cuz it's all I have
Half dark, half light, mix the sprinkles and you see what you like
You only hear the words you really want to spit back like a viper and only then --
Can't even comprehend where these phrases originate
Just into the brain and out through the bones
Bleeding internally for a touch and a kiss that he, whoever, it may be, will eventually..
It's all a metaphor, it's all a simile to the constant bickering inside
Whatever it means and just won't hide
Author notes
randalstown
A contest entry
- your inner personal thoughts by x Bright Eyes x.
700 points, ended July 22, 2007, 52 entries
Silver trophy winner
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450 points, ended September 12, 2007, 36 entries
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congrats on the trophy! nice poem here, great flow. so deep meaning for lots of people I'm sure.
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oh my goodness, these songs i dont recall cussing
yet it got thepoint across. Indeed well expressed poet. best of luck to you
Tory
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It's a really good poem, but I'm gonna have to Dq you. Sorry. I didn't want any cussing in the poems in my contest. Thanks for the entry though
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This is a nice poem, but some use of slang makes it seem less formal..definitely shows your thoughts and is very interesting to read. It really makes one think about what you're trying to say. It flowed very well, but honestly it is slightly vague and I didn't come away with a clear idea of what you mean. But overall, it is quite good. Thank you for entering my contest!
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Wow. That's very good. I usually don't enjoy reading poems that don't rhyme but somehow you kept my attention and I'm glad that you added this to my contest. I wish you great luck.
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Please change to a plain background or I will have to DQ this poem. Thank you!
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hi i thought this was excellent and i loved reading this also thanks for sharing this and good luck in my contest and thanks for entering my contest also loved the flow in this write
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It really wasnt for my taste but It was well written
Thank u for ur poem in the contest!
Fire Angel
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Honest
There is such a lot of sadness around i can only take so much. I have had a look at a few of your poems and think they are all good, but are lost on me because they do not bring me anything that is new. That may be me being very harsh and i do not intend to be hurtful. I am sure there are no absolute right and wrongs this is just my perspective. Your poems do touch me and they make me feel sad
regards
perdix -
awesome and sad.
thanks for the entry in my contest!
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