My sturdy legs can tramp fair well
in philosophy,
and graciously the old steps spell,
dancing poetry.
Enroute to You, though - I fall!
sudden stiff and blue,
while 'lame' ones pass me where I crawl,
flying on to You...
will I not run until You hobble me?
But Saul was greater once in books than I!
Then show Yourself, or where I fall I'll lie -
give me his remedy. Then I'll cry loss
on everything but Christ and His grim cross.
Oh God! My Goal, my Prize, my Agony!
Author notes
Legs - in this expression, represent intellectual ability
Hobble - tying or tangling a creature's legs which prevents it from running.
Saul - a first century Jew who was learned in Greek philosophy and Hebrew tradition but didn't recognize God's Messiah until literaly knocked down and blinded by an appearance of Christ Jesus. Though his own mind reached after God, it took God reavealing Himself before Saul knew him.
Written February 4th, 2003
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stephanie sunshine: Hi, I finally took your advice and tried to re-punctuate this poem. I agree that it improved it, but am still not satisfied! Oh, well, someday I'll have time to work on my poetry again! Thanks.
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multi-faceted and again, inspirational. worldly knowledge is a passing, fleeting, transitory thing we often quest after in vain. it's so often a hinderance in our walk with God. not even on the level of "higher thought" and philosophy, but even on simple terms. we have to abandon a lot of preconceived notions concerning what is feasible and what is not before we can even come to Him.
as for the first stanza, i thought all the commas elongated one thought a bit much. especially considering that many things were covered in that space. it drones on without a more solid break in my opinion. i would consider playing with punctuation a bit more?
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Great title--great poem!!!
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A very good job, it was a little abstract so I kinda got confused, but otherwise I think this is a good piece.
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Cartwheels
I really liked this! I always like things that bring my bain to life!
Its ws easy reading it was the pondering that was hard!
Talent is the name of your gift!!!!!! -
Moonstone divine!
Actually, I found this deeply enjoyable, and quite easy to understand(Taking into consideration that I literally giggled like a school girl when I found the notes in the author comments!) Everything about this write flowed, and it's held together by the wonderful phrashing you put into it! A wonderful job, I must say!
I particularly enjoyed the third line, very awsome!
Howlz, growlz, and later prowlz! Myst. -
I don't really get it, but I don't usually get poems that don't just jump out at me though. I'm sure it's great! Thanks for sharing.
SD
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