Into the Hole of Oblivion
I had feelings once
for a certain person,
I wrote of them,
I sang of them,
I prayed for a meeting
But ALL to no avail!
Time passed,
and never healed,
and eventually
I moved on...
I threw away my feelings
for him
into the hole of oblivion.
But what I have come
to realize is
that I have thrown away
ALL MY FEELINGS!
And now,
I have none!
I feel and I do not feel
I can get hurt
I can cry
But I cannot love!
I do not know what the word means
or how it feels!
It seems
that I had accidentally
tossed ALL of My Feelings
instead of a few!
Or was it the hole
that opened
and sucked all out of ME??
Leaving me hollow,
empty and unfeeling?
I see it now,
A black hole opening
in some space
sucking everything
into it and leaving
a hollow corpse,
a breathing being
but a dead heart!
As if the oxygen I breathe
is not like the rest of humanity!
As if I drink
a different water.
Who and what am I?
Where have my feelings gone?
Why can't I like or love
like people do?
Why can I not return
a love so beautiful,
so sincere,
so sweet?
Is this what a silly crush
and unrequited feelings
do to one?
I feel yet I do not feel!
I feel pain for hurting others
I feel sad for the passing of others
I feel someone trying to love me
But I do not feel myself!
Who or What am I?
Oh! Evil Oblivion!
What have you done to me?
You were to take away
"some" feelings
But NOT ALL
as you have done!
Now, I walk the earth
with no feelings for anyone
till one day,
the hole of oblivion
should return my loving soul!
By: Nada Adel Sobhi
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Hello there, Nada!
I’m glad I came along and clicked on your poem. It made me think of all the times when I was under-appreciated and when the world seemed to want to cocme crushing down on me. It can be unfair. love is cruel. People can seem good but then they turn bad and it makes me feel sad. deadly sad...
Thanks for sharing this poem with us. Good luck in the contest. You rock!
Have an awesome day,
BJ.
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Aww im sure your not unfeeling. The fact that you could write like this shows you really can feel/ This was a great poem and i really enjoyed reading it.
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This was indeed well penned and spoke in heavy volumes of heartfelt sadness. Great job with it and best wishes in all you endeavor. Thank you for sharing this with me and best wishes. Keep that pen handy dear poet.
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Good
I really like the idea of accidentally throwing yourself completely to oblivion. It is a very romantic image. There were some parts of the poem that were not as strong. I think it has to do with the meter. Over all I really enjoyed it!!! :-D
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This was rather long but good
Thank you for entering this into my contest I wish you the best of luck
Redwing Spirit
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Brilliant content, I think a lot of people can relate to this (I know I can
). Great work, well written and there are some stanza's here that blow you away!
Thank you for the entry.
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i like this! finalist poetry!
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^_^
Interesting, I like it.
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Now, I walk the earth
with no feelings for anyone
till one day,
the hole of oblivion
should return my loving soul!
i loved the ending !!! keep on rockin
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Powerful sentiments. Thanks for entering
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that is sensational
yeah i love the words, very expressive and very meaningful, and yes sometimes feelings to love a certain person are so alienated from the rest of our love feelings simply for the bad damage and hurt one suffered till time or another person comes to restore trust and gives you back your feelings hidden in the hole of oblivion.
great write, wonderfully expressed and great choice of words
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