The Red Flashes Of Light
That Struck My Heart As
I Watched Them Fall And
Fade Through The Pastel
Painted Sky,
And Those Screams I Heard That
Echoed Through My Ears,
That Fractured My Nerves
To Make Them Shatter Like
Glass,
That Copper Scented Stream
That Ran Through My Veins,
The One That Split My Mind
And Infected My Thoughts
With Images Of Blood Stained
Faces,
That Bitter Taste Of Your
Venim That Ran Through
My Mouth As Your Lips Brushed
Against Mine,
The Pinned Tingles I Felt All
Over My Trembling Body As You
Ran Your Fingertips Down
My Blushing Cheek,
That Empty Feeling I Felt
Everytime You Smiled Or
Laughed, Like You Had Just
Poured The Blood From My Veins
Leaving A Hollow Beating Heart,
The Streams Of Tears That Fell
From My Eyes Every Night
Like Strings Of Icy Pearls
And The Fact You Didnt Even
Know Anything Was Wrong,
So That Was My Warning Sign,
For All Of This Time,
And I Never Even Knew.
Author notes
Hope Its Ok, It Means Quite A Lot To Me! xMx
A contest entry
- Not another titles contest.... by Andu.
450 points, ended July 13, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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I really must tell you that the imagery in this poem is simply amazing. I like the way you incorporated all this imagery with the senses, making it something tangable that we can relate to. I also think that this was a really good interpretation of the title that I set. I like where your imagination took you and were you went with this, it really is a lovely poem.
Unfortunately, it exceeds the line limitiation that I set, so I cannot count it as a valid entry it will not be fair on those who followed the rules if I do. I am really sorry. But I really did like this poem, you are a very talented writer.
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