Love.
A first impression
A lesson
That can't be taught
A revelation
Infatuation
Celebration
A time for your heart to sing like a bird
A time for passion to finally be heard
Letting time go by without a care
Love, where everywhere
Is just another square inch of heavenly wonder
A sweet arrow shoots through your heart
Aimed by Cupid, the angel of love, and of heartache
Pulling you into his grasp
Not letting you go until you're completely
Under his control
Then, ripping the arrow out of your heart
Leaving a hole
Gaping there, nothing to close it
Raw, red, screaming emotion coming out,
In the form of tears, agony, and bloody depression
Feeling lost and ashamed
Until the next time cupid plunges the arrow through your awaiting heart and soul
Hoping to conceal hope and faith,
And rid of unwanted defeat and self-hatred.
Love.
Author notes
Option 5. You know what? It was just a random thing. No idea where it came from. No idea where I got the inspiration, I just sort of went with it. But for it to be a freeverse, I think I did pretty darn good. And ergh, I told Kimmie I would edit my Author's Note, so here I go! Okay, maybe it was a LITTLE true and a LITTLE not random, but it was totally freeverse. And how she knows me so well, I have yet to figure out.
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This is a very good piece and very sweet.
I'm hard to please with love poems beause they all seem sooo cliche to me, good luck in the contest though. -
I think you have captured the essences of love from it's beginning to it's sometimes painful ending and our never ending quest. Good look!
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Thank you!
I like the way you put that, "Never Ending Quest," That's a really great way to put it! Thank you for commenting, and good luck judging!
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Very painful, yet sometimes true. I like this... The emotion is so vividly real it's amazing. Great job. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Thank you
Thank you!
At first I didn't want to admit this really happened...
I'm not good at showing weakness, or showing that I'm in pain, which is why I express it through my poetry. But then, my best friend, I've known her since 5th grade, she let me know it's okay to let people know that I'm not always stable and I'm not always strong.
I'm glad you commented! Good luck judging the contest!
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You know what, I can totally relate to you in this one! Last October, my ex dumped me on our one-year, and I was devastated. I had never cared about anyone enough to trust them before; He was the first I really opened up to, and he threw it all back in my face. I really do think that love and pain are one in the same... You can't really have one without the other... But let's just say that I've been where you have, and I completely understand where you're coming from. If you need to talk, feel free to add my MSN [it's on my author page], or IM me here. Trust me, you'll soon find someone worthy of your affections. If there was hope for me, then there is hope for the rest of the world. Bravo!
Best wishes,
L.
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AW!
YOU ARE SO SWEET! Thank you. NOW, he's trying to contact me, and I dunno. It's not like I'll ever see him again. I'm not really worried about him anyway. I've got my eye on a cute new guy at my school 
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This is a good poem. Very descriptive and imaginative. For me though love is a good thing and will always be. I do not believe it was love (at least for one side of the relationship) if someone is out hurting you. To define what true love is, is not horrible pain given to you by another. I did enjoy the fact that in the end you seemed to realize that even though one person was an idiot, another person could fill the hole some day. Keep writing and good luck in the contest!
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Well, the sad part wasn't really apart of what was going on. The happy part, up to I guess line 12 is where I am. Hopefully, I won't have to feel lines 13-27, otherwise, bring on the cheesy love poems! I don't really think there ever is lost hope with love, somebody out there, no matter what, is always going to love you if you let them. I don't think love is pain either, I think love within itself is perfection, but we humans can't really fathom it until we experience it, and it's the side effects that make some people think it's terrible, and that's why they give up. But eh, what do I know? Thank you again for reading! Good luck judging!
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Yes u did do pretty darn good. And I bet you do know where this poem came from. You just don't want to admit it. It wasn't just a random thing. It came from your own experience with love complication. Trust me I somehow know things like this. Wonderful job. This came from your soul. Whether you know it not it did
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This is what happens when you're my closest friend for two years! You know me too well!! And what is there to admit? Nothing happened, we're just staying friends!! Buddies! Acquaintances! Pals! How do you know these things?? Did it sound too deep, or too terrifying, or what? And I have absolutely nothing to hide! Ask me anything in a message! I'm partially denying this but partially accepting this! Thank you for commenting it, and I'll edit my author's note.....ergh.....I'll get you Kimmie!
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This is a pretty good poem especially for a freeverse. Keep writing your wonderful poems and i'll keep reading them ~Shirree
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Thanks!!!
Thank you so very much!! It means a lot people still like to read my poetry! Well yeah and I was a little inspired by everything that's happened in my life lately, but not as much as I thought I'd be. I was influenced by different stories and poems, so I thought I'd write one. Thank you again!
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This poem was so awesome! I'm so glad that you entered it in my contest. good luck and best wishes!
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Tee hee
Thank you! And I'm happy you enjoyed it, good luck judging! You're the best!
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this nice... cute write. Maybe thought a bit more desciprion colors to enhance the imagery but the flow was there and emotions was enough nice work
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Gracias!
I improved it a little bit! I added a few more adjectives to it to really make it pop, thank you for the tip! But I don't think I'll edit it much more after this unless it was something really really important like maybe a misspelled word, or something.
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