Once in da ghetto
me posse n me
hung
frem der tree
won't it peas ya
ta barry me
n me posse?
If ya being
kin ta me
no plag ill come ya
nor lurv ta flee
just me posse
n me ghetto
swingin' frem der tree.
Tack me down!
Cover n all me
dare 'neath yer shovel
'ere oughta be
tank ya sir divinely
do me posse n me
tack to untie me
n me posse if n
ya peas
'nuff dun n
dun well ta me
Author notes
I'm still alive
A contest entry
- Anything goes! by Wonderwhenitllrain.
300 points, ended June 20, 2007, 16 entries
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It's kind of hard to read... but I can tell it was big part of the poem, but I think the spelling was too distracting that I kind of missed the point.
But it still seems to be a nice poem.
Thanks for entering
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A foolish poem you say? (To say nice is to say foolish. If you don't believe me check the dictionary.)
I am extremely interested in sound poetry, the rythmn of sound and smashing to heck poetic convention. The spelling is not the point. I have the sense that you have been taught grammar, the importance of spelling and punctuation for literary forms such as essays. When it comes to poetry, the sooner that you learn that lines are not sentences, that punctuation is not necessary but optional, that every word has a unique sound and has an infinite possiblity of manipulations, if you engage words with imagination, you'll learn spelling is a matter of context, and dependent upon the language explored. If I was going for proper Oxford English this poem would fail. The text fits the tone and rythmn required to make this poem work. My concern for you, as a reader here, is that you are reading this with a creative bias. If you want to restrict creativity and are not open to experimentation with language, that is your choice, but you cannot get far in the contemporary writing world this way. -
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I know foolish is one of them eanings of the word nice, but it's not the only one.
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it's good and all, it's just that it's hard to understand. I like that your using different not exactly techniques, well, I mean, just stepping outside the box and all.
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