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Long gone

I know what I felt
And felt what I knew
But none of that matters now
As I can see right through you
Lie and deny as much as you can try
There is nothing you can say that I would buy
It is over, the past is done
The future is plenty, you are none
Deliver me from all evil and I’ll be rid of you
Living is the cure to escape from the disease that is you
Out of my mind, back in control
Haunt my brain, aint nobody home

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  • wendy
    July 15, 2007

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    It sounds like a personal mantra meant to be repeated over and over again, until all anger is vanquished. Writing is so cool! It's wonderful to be able to let go of problems through words.


  • onlyazero
    July 15, 2007

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    emancipated

    "It is over, the past is done
    The future is plenty, you are none
    Deliver me from all evil and I’ll be rid of you
    Living is the cure to escape from the disease that is you
    Out of my mind, back in control"

    That's tellin' 'em! This write tells about the liberating feeling one gets after freeing yourself of an extremely bad relationship.

    I'm glad you found that feeling and somewhere to vent it out.

    Congratulations!


  • Barbara gold member
    July 14, 2007

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    I... I really like this. I was going to mention about the apostrophy(sp?) in aint... but... it actually reads better without it.

    Deeply personal, but at the same time widely approachable as a poem. There is a subject matter here that should be left alone, yet needs to be said for all to read and absorb.

    Well done, my friend.... whom I have not visited in far too long.