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My Life is Worth Living Because:

Sorrow is no longer the song I sing
Now that I have a new refrain,
You see, my faith is strong and to it I cling
And my soul is now free from pain.

My life was once chaotic and dark,
Replete with terrible despair
And quite often I sadly missed the mark
Very simply because I did not care.

So I resolved one day to end it all
As the sin had robbed my will to live
You see, life was covered by a gloomy pall
And I felt it had nothing more to give.

Then I heard an incredible story told
About a Father who sacrificed His son
Which warmed my heart that once was cold
And so another soul was won.

As I look back on those grim wasted years
That left my soul so very stained,
I feel happiness swell and turn to tears
Because of the new life I have gained.

Sorrow is no longer the song I sing
Now that I have a new refrain,
You see, my faith is strong and to it I cling
And my soul is now free from pain.

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Option #5-This is a testament of who I used to be and the subsequent spiritual transformation.

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  • duana
    October 30, 2007
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    Okay, just so you know, my favorite lines that are simply amazing:

    So I resolved one day to end it all
    As the sin had robbed my will to live

    You see, life was covered by a gloomy pall
    And I felt it had nothing more to give.

    I like these lines as two couplets, because there is such an important message in each separately. The first one, doesn't really sound like suicide (only in reading your comments did I realize you meant that). Instead, it just sounds like the consequences, the end to the road of sin was simply that it robbed you of your will (very different than you CHOOSING suicided).

    And the second couplet is still like the gloom of world literally took your spirit away. The way you have phrased these it is like you have subtley and successfully personified sin and pall - and you were the passive one the world was acting up on. I really like this interpretation.

    Then I heard an incredible story told
    About a Father who sacrificed His son
    Which warmed my heart that once was cold
    And so another soul was won.

    And this as the next stanza could not be better placed. You add a fresh new perspective to this with the way you phrased it, and you're rhythm.

    I loved this! Thanks for entering into my contest.

  • duana
    October 30, 2007

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    wow- I am not kidding, this literally made tears run down my cheeks. This is simply beautiful. At first I cut and paste a couple lines I liked, and then I came across more, until I just couldn't write your whole poem down here. This has the power and assurance of something more than the human spirit behind it. Beautiful. I sure hope you share this many times over with people in real life, and even try to publish it. It is wonderful. Duana


  • Sara Bellem
    September 10, 2007

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    SO BEAUTIFUL! And it sounds like me talking to Jelly too! OMG! You are just like me or could convey us perfectly! I use to be suicidal and then I found God again and he helped me restore the life I have now and I am completely happy! I just wish I could have came up with a masterpiece like this!!! This is so perfect! Thank you so very much for entering!!!


  • brightXdarkness
    July 27, 2007
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    I am so glad that you were able to find something to save your spirit from death. It takes a lot to get out of depression where everyday you feel is not worth living. You pulled yourself out of a lot and you should keep thinking about how strong you are and how proud you should be. I am proud of you! Thank you for entering my contest, and good luck!

    Alex


  • XxrockxXxgirlxX
    July 9, 2007

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    I liked it, although I'm not Christian I respect those that are, thank you for the interesting insight into this topic. Thatnks for the entry good luck


  • Angel w o Wings
    June 22, 2007

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    Well, my friend, you're not so bad your self. Life is an amazing ride when you have God at the wheel. Will have to read more of your work in the near future. Good luck in the contests.


  • BabyBun silver member
    June 20, 2007
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    What a journey you have taken. A beautiful write. Thanks and good luck!


  • Lie 2 Me Once Again
    June 19, 2007
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    Yay Great job! Life is so amazing.
    Thank you for entering


  • Heavens Child
    June 19, 2007
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    This brought tears to my eyes, what a powerful testimony. It has touched me deeply.


  • Olivias Violin
    June 19, 2007

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    "Sorrow is no longer the song I sing
    Now that I have a new refrain,
    You see, my faith is strong and to it I cling
    And my soul is now free from pain." - great to hear !

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