I continue to hold onto
A picture I burned
The ashes I could show you
But I’ve learned
That if I keep them close
No one can mock me
Or tell me my reason is gross
Because only I can see
That there’s only the ash
Of a love I burned long ago
I know it should be in the trash
Yes, yes, I know
But I can’t bring myself to do it
I can’t bring myself to throw it away
Or pass it away, sell it in bits
Cause, what can I say?
I continue to cling to
A picture I burned
Hoping that maybe you
And my love may be returned
Author notes
Okay, so my step sister and my ex boyfriend are kinda hooking up and it really is bothering me. I don't want them too! So, when I thought about it... this is what I came up with.
Please tell me what you think
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Heya! I really like the concept here, holding onto the picture you burned. The last stanza is nice. But there were a few lines that didn't make as much sense and felt like you were groping for a rhyme. "Or tell me my reason is gross...Or pass it away, sell it in bits/
Cause, what can I say?" Those were the weakest lines to me. And could you do me a favor? Cause is the cause of the problem. Cuz is the actual way to write that word without confusing the reader. Anal, I know, but I am. But other than that, it's a pretty good poem. And you picked the background well; thank you for not being overly obvious and using the fire and black background. Love ya!
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