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The Furious Masturbator

Furious Masturbator, the story spreads
                  (like jam and cream cheese on bread)
details changing, embellishments added
as it passes from head to head
It woke her
                  (that furious masturbating)
shook the whole bunk bed
went on for hours, Jittery Jerk Groan,
or at least that is what's said

and I wonder
          if they knew
                what they would say
                                  if they found out
                                        what a beautiful boys hand
                                                                  was doing to me
                                                                                  as they slept

I think of the verbal graffiti,
what they'd say about the girl who got head
and I don't pass on the story of the furious masturbator
(who shook the whole bed).

Author notes

So I know its crass, and really really immature, but hey, its based on a true story. Don't go on a university camping trip if you want to sleep at night.

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  • Li snuffles
    November 12, 2007

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    HAHA masturbation.. y not?!

    i love this piece easy to relate to
    camping trip-giving head? masturbating?

    sounds like soem-one who could not control their urges

    easy to relate to

    you had me smiling at this piece

    lol...

  • Saffron gold member
    July 4, 2007

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    After reading your author's notes, I have to wonder--why would you want to enter something you identify as crass and immature into a contest that is not supposed to be that? I am just curious...

    I have to be honest with you on a couple of different levels. First, this offering wasn't really what I had in mind for this contest--I suppose I was looking for something a bit more sensual, and not crass or immature (your words here...). Now, having said that, I have to be honest in also saying that I did think this was pretty funny, and I guess those participating in university camping trips will do what those who participate in university camping trips do.

    Thanks (I think ) for sharing your experiences with us.

    Saffron


  • Amanda1
    June 29, 2007

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    This is very good! It seems like you were smiling the entire time you wrote it....! The best poetry is based from truth. Sounds like this memory will be with you for quite a while. Good work!