I used to live in a bubble.
It was rainbow oil in a puddle.
It was soft and calm.
It was unreality.
And when you came along it popped.
I don't know whether to thank you for that . . . or to kick you in the shins
Author notes
I'm not sure if this is what you wanted but I thought it was funny - option 4
A contest entry
- Dry Humour Examples by 2lullabyhaven.
500 points, ended June 19, 2007, 7 entries
Honorable mention
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This is wonderful kate
i know what you mean about living in a bubble
i had one also it kept me safe and in control and when Dominic came along i let him 'pop' it (sexual connotation there too...hahah.. couldnt help mself
and i've dropped my guard and to love him for that or kick him in the shins? we shall find out because i am more vulnerable than before.. i think this is what you are saying in this piece
congradulations
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A nice piece that you have written here.
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Thanks for your reentry. lol
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Powerfully written!!!
I like this poem - it's simple and direct, yet wields a heavy foot. Go ahead, kick em if you can, before they kick you first!!! ha. Best of luck in this contest!!! Peace, Cyn 
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personally I'd kick em in the shins...but I really like this actually alot...great write and thank you for entering...good luck
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This is funny, I am glad that you resubmitted it with me. lol
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The ending was funny. This was a short, yet cool poem. Good job and good luck in the contest!
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It's always best to go with shin-kicking. ^_^
Except in the case of dragons. Dragons don't like to be kicked in the shin. They tend to get testy. -
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ok, this is a strange poem... but it's nice.. I like it, tho... good emotion u put into it... it seems, tho, as if it should be a little longer... but, I guess it's still fine the way it is as well... lol. good job!
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This is really good. And makes good points about life all at the same time. I thank you for your submission into my contest.
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It is kind of funny. Thank you for entering my contest.
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