Lust
siphon
sardonic
cherub, mettle,
craved
My Lanturne Poetry
Picture inspiration
http://allpoetry.com/images/ext/Contest/2352/894.jpg?1182187842
Author notes
Picture inspiration
http://allpoetry.com/images/ext/Contest/2352/894.jpg?1182187842
Lanturne: The ‘Lanturne’ is yet another medieval Japanese poetry form of 5 lines with a syllable count of 1-2-3-4-1. The poem is center aligned and resembles an oil lantern and thus the name. Rhyming is optional and the form is usually employed to evoke serious thoughts.
My review of the poem before mine; Honestly I found to much things wrong to even comment. I dont feel it my place to say so on the poem itself...I guess I have to much heart to hurt anyones feelings..
I also found the first poem to be redundant at times and again...feel awkward to make any kind of comment equally unkind...lets just say I was lost for words...
I hope you understand what I am saying.
If you like I can pick others....
A contest entry
- PICTURE INSPIRED by Arkbear.
300 points, ended June 28, 2007, 25 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Thank you for your Honesty ~
Mal ~
A play on words always get my attention ~
Nicely done !
Bear ~
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Sweety
I usually love commenting first as you know but on this one I don't want to...
I don't really know other poetry forms and I haven't studied poetry so to me this is all new and wonderful...I love how it forms a lantern...
Good luck in the contest my sweet friend
Love ya
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These lanturnes are very hard to
master...some people make them sentences....I try to do them with words that tell a story in their meaning..this is a story of lust falling an angel. satan has prevailed with sins of mankind
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