"You were little,
not so little.
Huddled down into the dark corner.
You had fingers in you ears."
"It was to stop the noise.
The big loud angry noise."
"I know, Dear.
I am sorry for what you went through."
"Did Daddy know? Do you think he was mad?"
"Only he can answer that."
"I heard Mommy say she was glad,
glad that they all went away.
IT MADE ME MAD!"
"I feel so sad for all of that,
It made me mad too.
I know you did not know what to do."
"I want them back. I miss them all.
Will they come if I call?"
"No, Dear Heart, they cannot come,
there life down here is now done."
"Are they in heaven?"
"I know they are up in heaven,
running around with wild glee.
I can see how happy they are.
Angels lovingly setting them free.
Never hungry, never cold,
I know Jesus now loves them so."
"Oh I am so glad, it's not so bad.
If I think of them in heaven,
then I can't be so mad.
But, I miss them so!"
"I know."
Author notes
I have already dealt with this part of my life. So, it is not as traumatic as it once was. I have only wrote about this part one other time.
Once a year my father would take all my pets out and shoot them. I cannot stand the sight of a gun to this day.
This was a span of about ten years. From about seven years old to 16 years of age.
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joyya
A contest entry
- Connecting With Your Inner Child (Creative Writing Workshop) by kareneisenlord.
710 points, ended June 30, 2007, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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The author notes sent a chill down my spine and made my heart skip a beat... What kind of person would do that? Killing animals.. Thank you for your entry, this brings many thoughts to mind. Best of luck in my contest.
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Strong and powerful write.
Made me stop and think as I re-read this over and voer
Stay safe
~Amanda
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oh my!
he would shoot them?????????????????????
but why??????
what was to be gained by doing that???????????
heartfelt write with true life trama.......................
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Thank You SOOOOOOOOOOOO much for entering this wonderful & beautiful piece into My contest!!!!!!!!!!!!
best wishes...... and much MUCH love !!!!!!!!!
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All of the entries in this contest/workshop were absolutely amazing. It was a little agonizing to judge because I was moved by each and every one of them and through them, many of my own feelings and issues surfaced and found new resolution and hope. I sincerely wished that there were more than three main trophies to give out here, because they were more that were deserving. I was very inspired by each of your stories and the courage that you all show coupled with your fantastic ability to transform your hurt and suffering into hope and healing. Since you were all so good, I decided to focus on the following points for judging the winners of the trophies, much of which was emphasized originally in the contest criteria ; Following directions: (i.e. making a genuine connection, dialogue or interaction, and resolution). How it was resolved: Was I left with a sense of hope and healing? Emotional Catharsis- Did the writing bring out the readers' own feelings and reactions. (I read other readers responses, besides my own, as well). Poetic Ablility and Grammar- Important here but not the most important; was the writing grammatically correct and clear in expression, keeping it simple yet creative? It was not easy to choose, and you all received points and Honorable Mention for your new write, which was well-deserved! Thank you all for participating in this workshop contest and I know it was not an easy one. I am grateful for those of you who felt ready to take up the challenge as well as for those of you who had the wisdom to know if it wasn't right for you now.
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great penning in connectivity! urafinalist!
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I would have something to write Im sure if I could see the screen through my tear. Well done
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I don't know if it is because I have been a little more depressed and vulnerable feeling the past few days, but this really made me cry. Especially when I read the author's note about your father taking all of your pets out once a year and shooting them all. That was shocking and horrific! I am very sorry that you had to experience this year in and out. What that must have done to you emotionally and psychologically.
Still, there was much hope and redemption in your write. I was extremely pleased with how you were there for yourself both as a child and now, soothing, comforting and explaining it all to your inner child in an age-appropriate way and giving her, and yourself hope, that yes, your beloved pets are all in a wonderful place with Jesus; in a place of love and happiness. Yet, you were firmly realistic with your inner child that they are gone now and cannot come back.
I enjoyed the poetic stanza that you added as part of the dialog;
"I know they are up in heaven,
running around with wild glee.
I can see how happy they are.
Angels lovingly setting them free.
Never hungry, never cold, ",
and one day we will be reunited with all those that we love in that special place! I am so glad that you have healed this very very painful experience and transformed it into a story of compassion and love for yourself and your animal friends. Thank you for your powerful write and I wish you the best in the contest.
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I'm shocked by your comment - I did not imagine anyone would do that.
Your poem shows the emotional reality without explaining; it is true to the situation of two people who already know the facts.
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This contest is talking to your inner child. I could take the physical and mental abuse from my parents. But, the one thing that took the longest to deal with was the killing of my friends. This all happened many, many years ago and I am now at terms with it. Thank you for your comment. Hugs!
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