I'm doodling with my pen again, still thinking how your smile
just drifted through my memory and lingered for a while.
I no more try to swat it, like some irritating fly,
as now I have decided that it’s best to just say hi.
I dwell a little longer and my thoughts stray to the past,
when you stepped into my life and then stepped out again so fast.
I still see the little shadow near your smile; a gentle curve.
Why re-kindle all these memories, what purpose do they serve?
So I simply turn the pages in my mind and close the book,
and I know you’re always there should I need to take a look.
Life’s more simple now, no questions, no asking how or when,
and although I miss you dearly I wouldn’t tread that path again.
I’m happy with my memories, of someone special, just a friend.
I’m content to close my book, although it never reads ‘The End’
Author notes
Option 5
In a list
A contest entry
- Anything About Having to Move On by Athena of Starlite.
445 points, ended June 27, 2007, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Frienship & love??? by BlackDiamondWolf.
400 points, ended January 2, 2008, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - loving someone who dont love you by trace3grls.
300 points, ended December 29, 2007, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Tomorrow, The Sun Will Rise by Cyclical.
450 points, ended January 15, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - OPTIONS [pre-writes allowed] by LeilaJayne.
425 points, ended January 17, 2008, 25 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - TEN THOUSAND POINTS OF RHYME (Now 20,000+) Part 9 Feelings by cricketjeff.
1500 points, ended January 29, 2008, 50 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - feeling lost i want sappy stuff people by Pureisolation.
450 points, ended February 15, 2008, 45 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - .............. by Eulb kcalB.
425 points, ended April 13, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Everybody Loves Somebody by CatQueen248.
450 points, ended August 3, 2008, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Letting Go by lizwicker.
1050 points, ended September 9, 2008, 48 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A Lost Love by Corinthians13-4.
520 points, ended September 11, 2008, 29 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This flows and lilts so well and made for a great read.Daydreams and lost thoughts are captured and evoked brilliantly.Great write and a great read.
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...Yeah... just like that too... I just kind of... wow...
I'm thouroughly flabbergasted. The beginning explains exactly how I feel, and the end seems to describe exactly where I'd like this relationship to go -- and actually, I've beginning to think it might become that beautiful.
That just..... I really do love it. I'm completely awestruck by it, really.
Wonderful job (since I seem to have run out of words to describe this already). Thank you for letting me read this. It has definitely touched my heart.
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This was such a lovely write. I loved the lines "Why rekindle all these memories, what purpose do they serve?" "So I simple turn the pages in my mind and close the book, and I know you're always there should I need to take a look." I especially liked your last line "I'm content to close my book, although it never reads 'The End'." That's also an excellent question. When a relationship ends we are always left with the memories. Some are good and some are bad. Memories can be extremely painful or sometimes they are quite pleasing. Again a great write. Thank you for putting an option and for entering my contest
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you have a talent. I love the feeling of this poem. Keep it up
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awww such a beautiful write!
congrats on all those trophies and good luck in the other ocntest =)
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Utterly delightful and I am sure so true for nearly all of us!
Good to see you continuing to do so well in these contests. And now your Finale poem seems to be there to stay we both look forward to reading that.
Jeff and Sue
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thank for for entering my contest with this poem. I really liked reading it. this specific part in your poem really makes me think about myself and the past. "Why re-kindle all these memories, what purpose do they serve?
So I simply turn the pages in my mind and close the book,"
it really hit home so thank you for that. i also love how you epress you know he is there and your asking your self should i?? very well done. your a wonderful writer -
Not again!!!
I should be rapped upon my knuckles
for each comment I fail to make
I know I've read this one before
such time I should not take
Can I say you leave me speechless
when I read your brilliant rhyme
or just fess up and say I'm slack
BUT I'll catch up with all in time!!!
There cannot be too many more Cuz???
Ya Cousin
Congrats on all the shiny ones
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Awww... gave me goosegumps! I loved this!! Wish I had written it!! lol
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I absolutely loved the message of putting the past behind you,even if it isn't "The End", so to speak. If only I could do te same...but, heh, oh well.
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This is absolutely amazing. The meaning and strength within are impeccable. A fabulous read. Best wishes to you in this contest... x Love and light, Lavender Butterfly.
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so true and such a beautiful write well done
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GREAT!
i really love this. i actually can relate to this RIGHT NOW! and it's amazing that i happened to stumble upon it like this. my favortite part is the last two lines:
"I’m happy with my memories, someone special, just a friend.
I’m content to close my book, although it never reads ‘The End’".
[i swear if it wasn't copyrighted, i would steal it and use it to tell the boy how i REALLY feel.]
GREAT poem.
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I’m happy with my memories, someone special, just a friend.
I’m content to close my book, although it never reads ‘The End’
Ah..what a descrption of life is told here..so heartfelt and touching as well.well done...
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Why re-kindle all these memories, what purpose do they serve?
So I simply turn the pages in my mind and close the book,
I’m happy with my memories, someone special, just a friend.
I’m content to close my book, although it never reads ‘The End’
I love these lines! This really is a brilliant poem, it reminds me of something I would write. Your constant reference to closing the book are great. You've woven them in expertly. Your spelling and grammar are both perfect. This is an example of the poetry I love! well done! keep up the fantastic work you talanted poet! -
I really enjoyed this poem. Inspiring and full of love and emotion. Your closure was plain but not infinate; thanks for submitting this! Good luck.
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I really, usually don't enjoy rhyming anymore, but you did this very well, I like this piece alot, the rhyme scheme doesn't come off as silly or trite at all. Thank you for this wonderful entry!
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This is such a lovely poem and I absolutely loved the ending of this. "although it never reads 'The End". You have done well here to express emotions and feelings and well done for winning the honorable winner trophy.
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this is excitingly deep.it has a unique pattern and i can connect to it so perctly well.
this is a wonderful piece keep it up. -
"I’m happy with my memories, of someone special, just a friend.
I’m content to close my book, although it never reads ‘The End’"
This is absolutly my favorite part.....so many times its not really the end. This peice is so amazing and I love it, great work here. -
I think everyone experiences this... You can just be sitting there, doing absolutely something of nothing when a person just pops into your head. You find yourself reminising about the good times and the bad, and then you get emotional and you kick yourself for remembering. Then you wonder what would've happen if things had turned out differently...would you still be together or happier as friends? Then you kick yourself again, thinking: "It's over, leave it alone. You had your chance, you blew it, get over it. Why am i even thinking about them?" And you push it out of your mind but it's always there...an unfinished story written on the pages of your mind
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I liked this read, very enjoyable. I can see how this poem won an honorable mention. It read very well, the words just flew off the page. I liked the lines "So I simply turn the pages in my mind and close the book,
and I know you’re always there should I need to take a look."
All and all the whole piece is well written.
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I really like this...but I have a question. Were you trying to write iambically? I don't think you were, but could you respond soon? Thanks.
Anyhow, I really did enjoy this.
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Hi Chuck,
The 8th and 9th lines, with 10 syllables and 7 respectively, spoil an otherwise excellent flow.
As to the content - beautiful thoughts and beautifully put.
Have the clap!
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I really enjoyed this write It flows and rhymes perfectly. I wish you well in this contest
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